No, there’s much more to the story.  I’m finishing up the next chapter now;  I’m deciding on whether to divide it into two or not.

Also, after posting the links to ENF stories I liked, I’ve started re-reading my old favorites in an effort to improve my writing.  It has slowed my posting down a bit, though.  But don’t worry, I haven’t abandoned the story.

I wonder what Mona was thinking when she opened that door and looked in.

that this now felt like getting fully dressed

Great thoughts from Kari there. Interesting how one’s perspective shifts.

The photo shoot was fun, nice to imagine the scenes as you described them.

I liked how Kari and Jessie had that important talk on the plane. It’s good to have that potential stumbling block out of the way. Personally, I would have preferred if Kari had solely chosen Jessie, as they know each other for so long already, but don’t let that influence your story.

Then she laughed at herself, looking down at her bare tits and very short skirt, that this now felt like getting fully dressed. But after spending the last 3 days naked, it did.

Finally a precious little bit of clothing. 🙂

I like that she has Jessie now, which opens the door to learning more about her. There are a lot of people around all the time, so the few that tend go be around we want to gradually know more about them, how they act in various situations, etc. What sets them off.

So now Kari has two people. I wonder if they will start getting competitive over Kari.

Kari entered and was immediately surrounded by the studio staff, all complimenting her and saying how amazing she looked. Kari started to feel a little claustrophobic. Fortunately, Boulanger stepped up and they parted. He held both her hands and looked at her appreciatively. “You are a vision of beauty,” and then looked to his staff and said, “Won’t she look wonderful in all our ad media?” They all cheered and clapped.

Great opener with Boulanger, although it felt like I have seen this moment before. Still it was well written.

The photographer looked through his camera. “Wow, the greenery actually emphasizes how naked she is. This is gonna look great.”

The photo shoot was fun. Lots of interesting developments.

Might be worth it to zoom in on feelings a little more sometimes. Cave calls that, bullet-time. It’s pretty much an ENF superpower. I don’t do it enough also.

But for the most part this whole section was very good. A nice mix of action, dialog and situations.

Kari chuckled and said, “No, but here’s a souvenir,” as she threw it over to him. She breathed deeply and snuggled back against her girlfriend to sleep.

I like an ending like this – with flare.