https://nficstoryboard.com/content/closing-time/?utm_source=rss&utm_medium=rss&utm_campaign=closing-time Short Stories, Novels, Series Tue, 21 Jun 2022 10:30:52 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=5.8.13 https://nficstoryboard.com/content/closing-time/#comment-4285 Tue, 21 Jun 2022 10:30:52 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=3069#comment-4285 Thank you to everyone for the comments and awards. I’m happy to see my short story was well received.

]]> https://nficstoryboard.com/content/closing-time/#comment-4284 Tue, 21 Jun 2022 07:21:13 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=3069#comment-4284 I didn’t realize they were a couple till the very end. Before I was just amused about what appeared to be double standards by the narrator when he talked about the three “jerks”.
What I generally like about your stories is that they appear to be soundly rooted in reality. That always makes it fun to read. Even more so after the second reading.

]]> https://nficstoryboard.com/content/closing-time/#comment-4262 Sun, 19 Jun 2022 06:12:29 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=3069#comment-4262 I forgot to add… Most Amount of Public Nudity Award. Second Read is even better Award.

]]> https://nficstoryboard.com/content/closing-time/#comment-4247 Sat, 18 Jun 2022 22:32:12 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=3069#comment-4247 Great surprise ending. You play a bit of a ‘Jedi mind trick’ on the reader. “This is not the stalker you are looking for” as we discover the truth of the conspiracy at the end.So”This is not the stalker you are looking for” award. 

]]> https://nficstoryboard.com/content/closing-time/#comment-4238 Thu, 16 Jun 2022 02:16:44 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=3069#comment-4238 Surprise twist award, Foreshadowing? Award, I know you are but what am I award The twist bumps up the plausibility a bit 

]]> https://nficstoryboard.com/content/closing-time/#comment-4227 Fri, 10 Jun 2022 05:01:12 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=3069#comment-4227 Brazen Perverted Stalker Award. Un-lucky Kim Award? Three Happy Jerks Award. Sneaky Cubicle Thief Award. Delightful Skimpy Bikini Award. Not your Imagination, yes she’s enjoying it, Award. The Considerate Robber Award. The Last Minute Panic Award. The Awesome Unexpected Bikini Purchase Security Tag Problem Award. The Three Videos Award. The Wonderfully Bare Usher To The Gate Award. The Smirking Tease of an Employee Award. The Great ENF Mall Dressing Area Award. The Fun and Clever Surprise Ending Award.

]]> https://nficstoryboard.com/content/closing-time/#comment-4225 Fri, 10 Jun 2022 03:45:07 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=3069#comment-4225 Most fun I’ve had in 9 minutes in a long time Award.
Double Standard Award.
(The 3 guys are ‘perverts’ but the main character isn’t?)
The “I pretended to ignore her” Award.
The “I had no choice” Award.
The ‘why did they decide to trust her and let her leave with a bikini?’ Award.
A second vote for Best Surprise Ending Award.

]]> https://nficstoryboard.com/content/closing-time/#comment-4223 Thu, 09 Jun 2022 22:43:18 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=3069#comment-4223 Best Supportive Boyfriend/Husband Award
or should it be
Best Supportive Girlfriend/Wife Award?
Best Surprise Ending Award
Fun Atmosphere Award

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