Comments on: Discovering Melanie Ch. 4 https://nficstoryboard.com/content/discovering-melanie-ch-4/?utm_source=rss&utm_medium=rss&utm_campaign=discovering-melanie-ch-4 Short Stories, Novels, Series Mon, 15 Dec 2025 19:14:59 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=5.8.13 By: ReaderMan https://nficstoryboard.com/content/discovering-melanie-ch-4/#comment-1256 Thu, 07 Jan 2021 03:20:04 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=1443#comment-1256 In reply to Cave.

Okay, I’ll try it. I’ll add a space here ->

 

Then I hit return twice.

]]> By: Cave https://nficstoryboard.com/content/discovering-melanie-ch-4/#comment-1247 Tue, 05 Jan 2021 06:57:13 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=1443#comment-1247 In reply to BPClavel.

Re: paragraphs

 

It seems that if you add an extra space at the end of a sentence as well as an extra return, it’ll save one of them. Will need to experiment more with spaces and/or returns.

]]> By: BPClavel https://nficstoryboard.com/content/discovering-melanie-ch-4/#comment-1244 Tue, 05 Jan 2021 02:03:26 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=1443#comment-1244 Wrap skirts, outfit of the week, it seems.Another nice chapter, although I’m a bit surprised that Melanie went through with dressing as instructed, given her aversion to being seen by Josy’s father. But I guess it shows that she trusts Josy … not that I would given what seemed to be a setup. But she has integrity, she’d agreed to the conditions (the unknown conditions).By the way, I didn’t notice any POV issues in this chapter. 

PS:
New paragraphs – this seems like a software bug. I recall Molly commenting on it as well. I have no idea how to get the paragraphs to show up as I’m intending. I put in hard returns, the site erases them. I edit, adding even more returns. It is a bit frustrating, but I guess it’s just a minor thing. If anyone knows how to get around these issues, maybe post a ‘how-to.’

]]> By: Cave https://nficstoryboard.com/content/discovering-melanie-ch-4/#comment-1240 Mon, 04 Jan 2021 09:21:44 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=1443#comment-1240 In reply to Art Mini.

Josy chose the right outfit for Melanie then 😉

]]> By: ReaderMan https://nficstoryboard.com/content/discovering-melanie-ch-4/#comment-1235 Sun, 03 Jan 2021 20:25:41 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=1443#comment-1235 Very enjoyable developments. Realistic and fun. The POV looks improved. 
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If I were you I might hit the edit button and add a space where a couple of your paragraphs have stuck together, but it’s not a big deal to leave it as it’s clear that they are new paragraphs.
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It seems Josy has Melanie figured out. That’s cool. Looking forward to more.

]]> By: Art Mini https://nficstoryboard.com/content/discovering-melanie-ch-4/#comment-1234 Sun, 03 Jan 2021 18:51:53 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=1443#comment-1234 OMG I love this. The perfect team. One likes to be exposed and the other likes exposing her. I got to be honest, as soon as you said wrap skirt I knew Melanie was in trouble. Wrap skirts are one of my favorite props in fantasies.

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