Comments on: Namaka https://nficstoryboard.com/content/namaka/?utm_source=rss&utm_medium=rss&utm_campaign=namaka Short Stories, Novels, Series Sun, 28 Mar 2021 09:30:33 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=5.8.12 By: Cave https://nficstoryboard.com/content/namaka/#comment-1823 Sun, 28 Mar 2021 09:30:33 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=1719#comment-1823 I like how this adds to the foundation of the story. In the Passion for the game, the spiked drink wasn’t explained very well, and it left open whether her friends were intentionally drugging her. I remember that part making me uncomfortable. This added background makes it much less severe than that. I wonder if Tutu Hannah finds her phone, or whether she forgets to tell Mona.
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I also like how she discovers how much better she can surf without fabrics diminishing her senses, and how nice of Geoff to help her with her skirt.

]]> By: ReaderMan https://nficstoryboard.com/content/namaka/#comment-1818 Sun, 28 Mar 2021 05:07:59 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=1719#comment-1818 I really liked this chapter. There was a nice mix of dialog and various sized paragraphs. It read very well and the characters and actions felt good.

Maybe the herbal energy drink will help her confidence when naked, kind of like a pop-eye’s spinach. I can’t remember the spiked drink in ‘Passion for the game’, and so I don’t know if this is similar.

]]> By: arthwys https://nficstoryboard.com/content/namaka/#comment-1816 Sat, 27 Mar 2021 22:13:23 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=1719#comment-1816 That’s a strong image: A Hawaiian goddess riding the waves.

]]> By: orflash64 https://nficstoryboard.com/content/namaka/#comment-1805 Sat, 27 Mar 2021 07:03:42 +0000 https://nficstoryboard.com/?post_type=wpws_content&p=1719#comment-1805 The plot thickens. Will she find relief or have to take care of it herself? Will she start to associate being naked in public with feeling horny?

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