Hmm, I definitely meant to say Beth was a couple of inches shorter, not feet! I’ve made a correction to the text.

Ahh… that’s a big difference. 

I’m proud of this particular concept, having something important written on a naked body. Thinking of different ways to strip Angela throughout this piece was a lot of fun.

You did an amazing job. This chapter really did really pop out in interesting ways. I also like how you handled her going along with things and her inner thoughts about him being not that manly. It’s cool how you reversed things, I mean, It’s usually it’s someone pushing hard, but this is kind of the opposite and yet it works surprisingly well. You have a good balance of many elements. I’m enjoying it a lot.

Sorry for being a slow reader this week. I’m just unusually busy recently.

Good sentence, and she must be crouching quite a bit to remove that 2 foot difference.

Hmm, I definitely meant to say Beth was a couple of inches shorter, not feet! I’ve made a correction to the text.

This is a fun direction. Enjoying this chapter.

I’m proud of this particular concept, having something important written on a naked body. Thinking of different ways to strip Angela throughout this piece was a lot of fun.

This last paragraph is kinda cute, but also confusing. Is it the shirt that is better than nothing?

Basically she’s just musing about how her standards for clothing have dropped. I’ve made some edits that should make things clearer.

Thanks for the great feedback ReaderMan!

“You’re stretching it,” Beth spat, puffing her chest out and standing on her tip-toes to tower over Angela’s crouching form. “That’s my favorite top!”

Good sentence, and she must be crouching quite a bit to remove that 2 foot difference.

“But it’s for work! I’ll delete them right after, I promise.”

This is a fun direction. Enjoying this chapter.

“No.” Angela folded her arms. “Get me some clothes, and I’ll come to your office with you. Then you can type your code out from the source.”

I like her resistance.

Itsy bitsy teeny weeny polka dotted string bikini? Better than nothing.

This last paragraph is kinda cute, but also confusing. Is it the shirt that is better than nothing? The shirt is probably better than the bikini that she was wondering about. Also it’s very unlikely the sister would have parted with the bikini. I would reword this for clarity.