As Melanie woke up, she stretched and kicked off her covers. It struck her as odd that she was wearing a shirt in bed, as she’d slept in the nude lately, but the memories quickly came back to her. Brian had walked her home and due to the rain, she’d invited him in.
She groaned at the memories of how she had behaved. In her mind, her behavior had been outrageous. She had mercilessly teased Brian to the point he had nearly stripped her naked. Somehow he had held back, and she was now intensely glad that he’d shown restraint.
The signals she had been sending Brian were all over the place, she realized. Though she had wanted him to strip her naked, that’s all that had been on her mind. She guessed that to most people, taking off clothes was a mere stepping-stone. It can be an exciting process, yes, but it leads to something else.
However, for Melanie being stripped was intoxicating. It was embarrassing and exciting. She knew from her recent experiences with Josy that it was more powerful than when she did it to herself, such as in her backyard. The problem was, how could she explain this to Brian? How could she explain that her mind hadn’t been on sex, but on being exposed, being stripped? Would he even believe it?
She guessed that someday in the future, if she met the right person, got emotionally involved with them, then she would take that next step. She liked Brian, but did not, or not yet feel such a connection with him.
She thought of Josy and the things they had done together. One could argue they had already taken some steps in that direction. Josy understood her somehow, understood what drove her.
Feeling no desire to think of how to deal with seeing Brian again on Monday, she dragged herself out of bed, and still wearing her shirt she went to the bathroom to take a shower.
During her shower, her thoughts went back to the way he’d looked at her. How he’d stared at her breasts through the shirt, her exposed skin, and between her legs while she had covered her pussy with her hand. It made her feel hot again and her shower took a bit longer than usual.
As she was drying off, her worries again won out over her arousal. He deserved a sincere apology, she thought, though she didn’t think she deserved his forgiveness. She wondered if Josy had time to talk. Tomorrow they had their first exam, and maybe Josy was busy studying. On second thought, she didn’t know whether she could tell Josy about last night.
After getting back to her room, she sent Josy a message.
~~~
Shortly after noon, Josy came over, but as she stepped closer, Melanie held her back. She didn’t want to be stripped naked by her friend right now. Instead, she gave Josy a summary of the study day with her friends, with them having a few drinks after, followed by walking home with Brian, the rain and going to her room. She thought of giving Josy a cleaned up and less embarrassing version of events but decided on a different tack.
“So… I treated him horribly when he was here,” she said, looking down, “And though I want to blame it on the alcohol, I owe him an apology. I don’t know how to face him tomorrow.”
After a moment, she looked up at Josy, hoping her friend wouldn’t dig for details and could give her some helpful suggestions for talking with Brian.
“If you want me to help, I need to know exactly what happened,” Josy said. After a pause, she continued, “I think it’s best if you show me.”
Josy’s suggestion made little sense, Melanie knew that she could just describe the events. She thought of calling Josy out on it. How does it help to re-enact what had happened? On top of that, she didn’t know whether she could bear to show to her friend all that had happened.
She looked at Josy and thought back on the things they had gone through together lately. Josy knew about her obsession with nudity, had seen her naked multiple times, had pushed boundaries by touching her intimately. As shameful as her behavior last night was, she thought Josy wouldn’t judge her too harshly. The more she thought about it, the more it made sense to show Josy what happened.
“Are you sure, Josy?” she asked, “It may be worse than you think, and I don’t know if you’re okay with it.”
“I can handle it, Mel, I promise.”
“Okay,” Melanie said, already blushing.
Josy took her phone out of her bag and said, “so you just got to your room, then what happened?”
Noting the phone in Josy’s hand, Melanie got suspicious and asked, “What are you doing with your phone?”
“Pictures will help give you a good perspective of what Brian saw,” Josy said.
“Not with your phone, you’re not!” Melanie was indignant.
Josy appeared surprised. “Just what did you show him that I can’t use my phone for? Fine, I’ll use your phone.” She took Melanie’s phone and unlocked it. It appeared she still knew her way around and Melanie saw her go into the secured folder they had set up together.
“I don’t know if you can take pictures of this, Josy,” Melanie said. It was embarrassing enough to show what happened, without Josy also taking pictures.
“Like I said, it’ll help you get a good perspective.”
“I suppose,” Melanie said, unsure. It made sense what Josy said, but it added to her nervousness.
Melanie directed Josy to sit where Brian had sat, and then repeated the events of last night as best as she could remember, starting with how she changed into the shirt. Only differences were that one, Josy didn’t turn away as Brian had and was taking pictures, and two, everything felt more intense without alcohol fogging her mind.
She had just shown Josy how she’d given Brian a side view of her butt after getting the water.
“That is so hot,” Josy said, taking another picture, and then asked, “How did he react to that?”
“He went to the door with our glasses and looked between my legs as he stood there.”
“He saw your pussy like that?” Josy asked, surprised, as she walked to the door, looking between Melanie’s legs.
“No,” Melanie blushed, covered her pussy with her left hand the same way she had last night. “Like this.”
Josy stood there, taking more pictures, and said, “If you were holding your hand like that, I think he saw more than you think he did.”
“What do you mean?” Melanie said.
“Here, look at the picture.”
Josy showed the screen and zoomed in on her crotch. Though she had looked at herself down there in the mirror, looking at the picture was something else. Now she was looking at a zoomed in picture Josy had just taken, and the zoom hadn’t even been necessary. She felt the heat in her face increase as she looked at the screen.
While her hand was covering her pussy, it wasn’t covering much more than that. Leaning back against the wall with her knees up, her asshole was clearly visible in the picture.
Melanie cursed under her breath, and said, “I didn’t think of that.”
“That is one hot picture, Mel,” Josy said. “I’m surprised he didn’t attack you right there and then.”
She blushed furiously. “That’s not helping, Josy!”
“Well, let’s continue. What happened next?”
“I got up from the bed, fixed my shirt and looked outside,” Melanie lied, heat rising to her face as she thought back to what really happened.
“Hmmm. What are you not telling me?” Josy asked, frowning at her.
“I… I…” Melanie knew she was trapped. Josy saw right through her lie.
“You what? What did you do?” Josy said, grinning.
“I touched myself,” she finally said, hiding her face with her right arm. The shame was too much to bear.
“We’re still re-enacting, so show me.”
That didn’t make sense, she knew, since this was not something Brian had witnessed. However, she couldn’t deny how her body was reacting to this entire re-enactment. Just like last night, she could feel she was wet and sensitive beneath her fingers. Did she really want to show Josy all that? And did Josy really want to see and take pictures of such an intimate act?
She looked up at Josy but had to turn her head away. The idea of doing this in front of an audience directly fed into her obsession, but it was still a shameful act. She couldn’t let Josy see her face.
“Please no pictures of this part,” Melanie begged.
Despite her shame she was unable to deny her arousal, and she slowly slipped first one, then another finger inside. She wanted to lose herself in the sensations, masturbate to an orgasm while Josy watched, but she held back. It took all her willpower to not move her fingers, though the trembling of her hand still stimulated her.
“Holy shit, Mel,” Josy exclaimed. “And he caught you like that?”
“N…no… sorry,” Melanie said, taking her fingers out. She got off the bed and fixed her shirt, turning away, and said, “Last night, I got up shortly after. I knew he’d be back soon.”
She finished her story. Instead of re-enacting, she described to Josy how Brian had nearly stripped her before leaving.
Josy had a worried look on her face and sighed. “Melanie,” Josy said seriously, “I know I joked earlier about him attacking you, but really it’s no joke.” She firmly took Melanie’s hands.
Melanie saw something in those eyes she hadn’t seen before. Josy seemed almost painfully worried about her. Brian himself had told her just a few days ago that she should be more careful. It made sense. It wasn’t just about her close call with the middle-aged man in the park, but around men in general. She didn’t think the typical guy would have shown as much restraint as Brian had last night.
“I’m sorry, Josy,” she said, throwing her arms around her friend.
Josy hugged her back and held her firmly. After they broke off the hug, Melanie thought she saw moisture in Josy’s eyes. She hadn’t felt these worries as intensely as her friend seemed to, and it made her feel awful. Though she had wanted her friend’s advice on how to deal with Brian on Monday, instead they just sat there in silence for a while.
After some time, she decided to try to change the subject.
“Are you looking forward to my thigh-highs?” she asked.
Josy perked up at that, saying, “Oh yes, the outfits we can do. They should arrive sometime this week, so you better prepare yourself!”
“Prepare myself?”
“Yeah,” Josy grinned. “But, ugh, I need to go. Not at all confident about tomorrow’s exam yet.”
Josy left shortly after, leaving Melanie alone with her thoughts.
Though Melanie still didn’t know how to apologize to Brian, looking back on the events with the help of her friend did help at least a little, as it gave her some perspective. She thought about the pictures Josy had taken and though she feared what they might look like, she had better take a look at them later, so that she knew what Brian had seen. She hadn’t even looked at any of the previous pictures and videos, she realized.
Not long after Josy left, she went to the kitchen to get a drink. Alani and Paige were there, sitting on a couch.
“Hey hot stuff!” Alani said.
She froze, staring at Alani. Had she heard that correctly? “Uh, what did you say?” she asked.
Alani laughed. She stood up, walked over to Melanie, and whispered in her ear, “You know, the shirt you wore to sleep.”
Alani saw her while she slept. What did she see? Melanie tried to remember the position she’d been in when she fell asleep on top of her covers. After her orgasm, she must’ve still been on her back with her shirt raised up to her breasts, leaving the words ‘hot stuff’ just visible. Only after waking up in the middle of the night, she’d slipped under her covers.
“What’s the joke?” Paige asked.
“You want to show her, or should I explain?” Alani asked Melanie.
Show? Explain? Afraid of what Alani meant, she shook her head. She wouldn’t, would she?
Alani turned to Paige, and said, “Ah, well. I got home pretty late last night, and to my surprise Melanie’s door was open, so I went to say hi.” Then she turned back to Melanie and said, “You were wearing the cutest shirt, Melanie. Come show it to Paige, that’s much easier than explaining, isn’t it?”
Melanie got herself a drink in the kitchen and could feel Alani’s eyes still on her. Alani had shown herself to be a tease before, though not to the point of being malicious. Would she really tell Paige what she had seen?
As she walked back to her room, Melanie considered the idea of wearing the shirt for them and weighed it against Alani telling Paige what she’d seen. How would Paige react? She didn’t know her that well yet, but from her impressions so far, it seemed that Paige was not the type to bully, or even condone bullying. Perhaps Paige would even tell Alani off.
Standing in her room, she looked at the shirt on her bed. Would it be all that bad to wear it around her roommates? She wouldn’t have to do anything crazy, just wear it, show it to Paige and nothing else.
She shuddered. Alani had seen her in that shirt, bunched up below her breasts, leaving the rest of her body bare. Had Alani made a sound and was that what had woken her up? It was possible, but she couldn’t be certain. Well, as long as there were no pictures, Melanie was confident she could handle it.
Even so, she wasn’t going to give in to Alani just like that. If Alani wanted her to go in just the shirt, then tough luck. She took off her comfy sweatpants and shirt, removed her bra and changed into a pair of nice panties. Then she put on the shirt. They wouldn’t see her panties unless they looked under the shirt, but she wasn’t going out there without them.
She walked back to the common room and sat down on the other couch and crossed her legs. It was opposite the one Alani and Paige were sitting on, but it couldn’t be helped.
“See? She’s hot stuff,” Alani said to Paige.
“I love it,” Paige said, smiling at Melanie. “Still not sure what the joke was though.”
“Never mind,” Alani said. “Inside joke, I guess.”
Melanie forced a smile at that, then took her phone to distract herself and relax. During the next hour, Reese and Julia joined them, and it turned into a relaxing afternoon.
As Paige left, she said, “Like the shirt, Melanie, and nice to see you get a bit more comfortable around us.”
Melanie blushed, remembering that Paige might still think she’s a nudist. She went to her own room shortly after, though she stayed in the shirt and didn’t change for dinner that evening.
Later that evening, as Melanie was getting ready to sleep, there was a knock on the door. After putting her shirt back on, she opened it to see Paige standing there.
“Hey, can I come in?” Paige asked.
“Uh sure, what is it?”
Paige walked in and closed the door. “I thought I’d check in on you,” she said. “That inside joke, as Alani put it, can you tell me what that was about?”
“It’s nothing important,” Melanie said.
“Hmm… You know, Alani can be a bit much to handle sometimes,” Paige said, pausing. “If it happens that she makes you uncomfortable, set her straight. She’s not the type to bully, she just doesn’t realize when she crosses a line.”
Melanie nodded. She didn’t know what to say to that.
“That being said,” Paige continued, “it’s a nice shirt.”
Melanie blushed and nodded again.
“It may become your nickname in the apartment,” Paige winked, then continued in a serious tone, “but if it makes you uncomfortable, let us know, okay?”
“Okay,” Melanie said.
“I’m a bit jealous, actually, how easy you can get away with not wearing a bra,” Paige said, moving her hands to her breasts, which were about two cup-sizes larger than Melanie’s B-cups. “Not that my boyfriend complains about these.”
Melanie blushed again, wondering how Paige could be so openly talking about her boyfriend’s appreciation for her breasts.
“Except for your nips poking through, of course. Anyway, I’m glad to see you be a bit more yourself around us, Melanie,” Paige said, as she went to the door, and then said, “Good night.”
“Good night,” Melanie said, looking down at her delinquent nipples and feeling embarrassed as Paige left.
Their talk left her feeling amazed and touched. It seemed she was right in her assessment of Paige as the mother hen of the group.
Being a bit more herself, Paige had said. Melanie pondered those words as she took off her shirt, leaving her naked in her room.
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Monday morning, Melanie arrived at the examination hall just over 10 minutes before the exam started. The hall was open and already filling with students, so she went in to find a spot to sit. She didn’t see her friends nearby and was relieved not to have to talk to Brian just yet. Thankfully, she was able to focus on the exam and it felt good about how it went.
After the exam, she found Sarah and Cohen in the hallway.
“That went well, right?” Sarah asked.
“Yeah, our study session Saturday helped a lot”, Cohen said.
Melanie wondered where Brian was. She’d been nervously looking out for him, but he wasn’t anywhere in sight. Was he in the bathroom or still in the exam hall?
“We have a couple of hours before the other exam. Let’s go sit somewhere,” Sarah suggested.
“Where’s Brian?” Melanie asked.
“He left already. He said he was going home between exams,” Cohen said. “Did you two get home alright on Saturday?”
“Yeah, no problem,” Melanie answered.
“We heard the rain and were worried you two got caught in it,” Sarah said.
“Uh, yeah, we did. We hurried to my building and took shelter there.”
Melanie was unsure what to say next. If she explained that they went to her room, that’d definitely raise suspicions, but she also didn’t want to make it seem that she sent Brian off into the rain by himself.
“And that’s all that happened?” Sarah asked, looking at Melanie.
“I gave him my umbrella, and by that time it stopped raining.”
“That’s nice. Meanwhile, Cohen and I were getting nekkid together.”
“What?!?” both Cohen and Melanie exclaimed in shock.
“Just kidding,” Sarah doubled over in laughter. “You should see your faces! Anyway, let’s go sit somewhere.”
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During the afternoon exam, Melanie focused on the subject matter. When she was done, she looked around to find where Brian was sitting. He was some distance away, but afterwards she saw him again leaving in a hurry.
She guessed that he was going home again, perhaps to avoid speaking with her. It worried her greatly, so she decided to go home right away as well, as she didn’t feel like talking about it with Sarah and Cohen.
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The next few days followed the same pattern, and Melanie’s worries grew day by day. Several times she wrote text messages to send to Brian, but every time decided against sending them. She wanted to talk to him in person.
She didn’t go running either, as she wasn’t in the mood to go by herself.
On Wednesday, the thigh-highs arrived in the mail. Melanie opened them, quickly tried them to see if they were a good fit, and then put them in the wash. Josy’s fun would have to wait, but then again, it seemed that Josy was busy every evening.
On Thursday, after the second exam, Sarah and Melanie were outside the exam hall. Like Brian, Cohen had left immediately after exiting the hall.
“I need your help with tomorrow’s exam,” Sarah said. “Can we go over our notes together?”
“Uh, yeah, of course,” Melanie said.
After getting a drink from the vending machines, Sarah led the way to the library. “I already scheduled a study room. Thank you for helping.”
Scheduled a study room? Melanie found that a bit odd, as they could just go to the study hall instead. As they entered the library and made their way to the study room section, they passed Cohen, who was heading the other way.
Sarah led Melanie to one of the doors and went inside, after which Sarah closed the door. The blinds had been lowered, hiding the room and its occupant from outside. Sitting at the table, taking his notes out of his bag, was Brian.
Melanie’s mental anguish at the beginning, showing why she felt bad about last night, is described so well. She loves being stripped or stripping, and doesn’t really want to associate that with sex, or going further. Obviously that’s going to be hard for Brian, especially if he doesn’t know what’s going on. However, I think that maybe he might be more understanding than expected, because he already knows a few things. Maybe Melanie’s worry is overblown.
I can imagine it must also being a sexy memory, something to perhaps make a shower take longer than usual.
Nice to see Melanie being serious with Josey and stopping the usual greeting process for once.
I like the build up… “I can handle it, Mel, I promise.”
Oops, that was one hot picture, Mel!
It get’s better and better. “Holy shit, Mel,”
And then things got serious. For the first time we see Josy really concerned for her friend. It’s nice to see that side of Josy once in a while.
So wow! This was a sexy re-telling like no other! A re-telling that even Molly herself would give her shining brand of approval for. Blair? I’m not so sure as he still suffers from a year’s worth of ‘re-telling trauma’ from our red haired friend dragging the poor bastard over the coals each and every time. Actually, to be fair, this is more of a re-enactment, with pictures, so maybe even Blair might give it a pass.
Nice to see developments in the apartment with Alani and Paige as well. I liked his situation and the direction in general. It was so well done. A nice ‘bully free’ environment, even with delinquent nipples roaming around. Nice that the end result was that Melanie is getting signals from her roommates that she can be herself.
I wonder if Brian is avoiding her. I wasn’t happy that they were not still running. Maybe he thinks he went too far and is ashamed of himself? Ta-da! Cliffhanger!
Thank you for the comments, ReaderMan!
I hope it gives readers a bit more insight into who she is.
Love reading your thoughts on everything!
Very well as always.It only miss me one detail.
How Melanie was dressed that day? Did she wear bra and panties?
Thanks for this so good story.
Thanks, glad you like it.
How she was dressed, do you mean the last day, where the chapter ends?
Unless otherwise mentioned, especially for an exam week, you can assume she’s wearing comfortable clothing with bra and panties. She doesn’t need the distractions while taking exams 😉
As a writer (I’m really saying that now, hehe)… but yeah, as a writer – I like the female interactions, the extra layers of communication and emotion that females seem to have. I like seeing progression with Melanie and her roommates, in terms of accepting who she is. Initially, that seems like a setup for fun ENF stuff, but on a deeper level, it’s just healthy for Melanie to be accepted by her roommates and feel comfortable in her room. That can be a big thing in college life.
It was good to see and understand Melanie’s challenge. Her attraction to stripping can easily be misunderstood by a guy. But not only misunderstood but actually dangerous as Josy discovered with the re-enactment. So again, fun ENF interactions, but enhanced by the extra realization that Melanie needs to be careful.
I think it was also good that Brian wasn’t typical, and resisted the superhuman urge to just plunge into Melanie. I’m not sure if females understand how much willpower that actually takes. I hope this means that Brian respects her (a lot) and perhaps understands her more than she realizes. This particular post was very fitting with the title of the story.
With roommates, you can be lucky or unlucky. If you agree on basic ground rules, you can create a relatively comfortable living environment for everyone. There’s always the possibility of things stirring the pot, though.
Oh God… Wasn’t sure if I should comment on this, but… You know, as close as Melanie was at that point, if he had ripped her dress off, she probably would’ve cum before he could lower his zipper… That said, she still would not have wanted it at that moment, so she’s very lucky he’s not typical.
I’m sure Melanie doesn’t, or she wouldn’t have gone that far.
Good point, then I raise my glass to pot stirring possibilities!
As interesting as that would have been… (actually that would have been very interesting) but as interesting as that would have been… (yes, I said it again) I think if they do end up becoming close, I hope that she gets time to be herself… and of course, learns how to set the pace. Hopefully Josy’s message got through to her.
That’s a very promising team you have here:
Melanie, loves to strip or being stripped and loves the excitement and embarrassment.
Brian, who is into “Embarrassed Nude Females”.
Josy, who apparently likes to dominate Melanie, especially stripping her and making her embarrassed.
So, if Josy and Brian gang up against Melanie, things will become really interesting. However, as both care very much about Melanie, she will be safe. But in for quite a ride.
I am looking forward to your next chapter. It is very well written.
Good summary of the characters, I’d say. It can go a number of directions, of course, and both Josy and Brian caring about Melanie, doesn’t mean they can’t gang up against her. It would certainly open up possibilities for fun.
arthhwys, regardless of ganging up or not. I think Josy’s more than enough of a pusher. She’s practically a gang of pushers – all by herself. But yes, working together could be fun, or they each could just push Melanie’s in their own ways. Or Brian might scheme to push the both of them, pulling poor Josy into the mix, giving her a taste of her own medicine. I guess the possibilities are endless.
Another thought has crossed my mind. The possibility of Josy and Brain become rivals for Melanie’s heart. If Melanie goes far enough in one direction with either Brian or Josy, and the walls of a relationship begin to form, it could leave the other out in the cold.
Oh no, did you really just suggest a love triangle?
Remember folks, you heard it here!
Hey… it’s a fair prediction. It’s not like I suggested a three-way, with Brian & Josy or Josy and one of those roommates.
I know this is from a few chapters back, but it’s one of my favorite lines. When Melanie was meeting her new roommates for the first time. Melanie’s reaction was perfect as well. It was a powerful line. Josy is brilliant. Other potential names for the story could be ‘Discovering Josy’s influence” or “Creating Melanie”
They said no orgies in the common room, and Melanie’s bed is not big enough for that.
Melanie, Melanie, Melanie … you are having too much fun!
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And isn’t it interesting to ride along with Melanie as she learns that, for her, being exposed is not simply a precursor for sex. It’s an end in itself! From Mel’s thoughts: “How could she explain that her mind hadn’t been on sex, but on being exposed, being stripped? Would he even believe it?”
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But I have to say that ReaderMan accurately predicted some of what was going on in mind as I read this chapter. In my first story (The Exhibitionist Next Door), I did at times have one character tell another what had happened. Molly, bless her heart, did often provide me with some good advice … that I needed to limit such retelling scenes. And she was right; it was great advice, actually. And I learned to do so.
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So, in short, I think that such review (as I did it) should be kept to a minimum. You’ve added a nice new twist. First, Melanie reviews in her mind what happened. Readers learn things they did not know. Next, Josy comes and they talk. This is not only a retelling but also a reenactment. It’s an entirely new scene. There is a nice new layer of embarrassment as Melanie is forced to admit (and she’s no longer under the influence) what all she did with Brian watching. AND she gets to see herself as he did. That’s fun! There was more exposure than she had realized.
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ReaderMan (bless his heart) said I would give you a pass. I think I do, but I might qualify that by saying that I believe that readers would prefer the story to be marching forward rather than recounting past events. Would Molly give you a pass? I wouldn’t dare to speculate. She might show up on this thread in the near future. I don’t need to again get my ass chewed. I say that, but in all honesty, I grew a great deal as a writer because she always told me her honest opinions (even when it made it hard to sit down for a few days). In that same spirit, I feel an obligation to be similarly forthright.
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And from there, lucky chapter 13 marches forward. But Brian is elusive. That’s a bit frustrating. Cave is making us wait. But that’s fine. I’ll be back! It’s a great story. I can be patient. Admittedly, I’m chomping at the bit for more. I hope the wait is not that long, but I don’t want Cave to feel rushed. Quality over all else!
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Best regards, Blair
Hi Blair, thank you for your comments.
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First off, sorry to yet again make you wait for the thigh-highs. They only made a brief appearance, though you can speculate as to what else Melanie was wearing or not wearing when she was trying them on to see if they fit. I hope that helps with the wait.
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The retelling did make me worry when I was writing it, but I hope in the end it can be forgiven. The excuse I would like to offer at this point is that I’m still learning. Only 13 chapters in, after all.
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If Molly does at some point visit my story, I hope she’ll be herself and not hold back. If necessary, I’ll stand for a week.
Please continue to do so!
Cave,
You hope it can be forgiven?
Maybe my post was a bit wordy, but that was there. Appreciation for the “twist” you applied to your retelling. I feel as if I learned something. As writers, we have to be always learning. Thanks, and I am beyond delighted to see how much attention your worthy effort is getting. But it’s not a surprise. It’s light (but not too light), and so very fun.
Blair
Now, if I could only figure out how to get this site to allow paragraphs breaks without all the anguish.
Of course that is good advice. I fully agree, however in this case I would not have wanted to miss this specific re-enactment. I believe that Cave cleverly danced around the rule with grace. That’s how the pass was earned.
It’s very good sign to ‘worry’ about the ‘re-telling’ aspect, even though it was in fact a re-enactment with lots of different elements. My last chapter has re-telling, many paragraphs of it, and I just blatantly broke the rule. But moving forward I will probably just keep it to a single paragraph or two at the most.
I love how we’ll you captured that it’s about the nudity and embarrassment and not just sex. Very well done!
Thank you. I’m glad you’re enjoying the story so far.