As Melanie, Josy and Sarah were waiting for the bus outside the mall in a walled bus stop, Sarah broke the silence that had persisted since they left the store. “Do you want to see the bikini I got?”
Melanie jumped at the chance. “Oh! Yes, please.”
They were not the only people there, but it wasn’t crowded either. The three girls huddled together to compare suits.
Sarah had gotten a high cut light and dark green with pink patterned bikini that would provide moderate coverage of her butt. The halter top had long straps designed to wrap and tie around the chest while leaving most of the back bare. The front was open in the middle and would show some cleavage.
Josy’s bikini, which Melanie hadn’t seen yet either, was a cheeky cut with narrow side bands, providing slightly more coverage than a thong. The top was a regular cut with a cute stripe design. Melanie remembered Josy’s promise to wear a thong as well and wondered if Josy wanted to wear this one tomorrow. It wasn’t exactly a thong, but Melanie didn’t feel the need to make a big deal out of it.
Sarah was impressed with their suits, especially Melanie’s choice to go for a thong. “If I’d known, I might’ve gone for a thong as well!”
Melanie perked up at that idea. “We can go back.”
“No, it’s okay. Maybe my next bikini.” Sarah winked.
On the return trip, Melanie and Josy were mostly quiet. To free up time to go swimming the next day, they decided to do homework and chores, so they said ‘bye’ at the elevators.
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The next day, Melanie woke up early but lazed in bed for a while, hugging her blankets. Thinking about swimming, she moved her legs around under the covers, enjoying the feeling of freedom that came with sleeping in the nude. For a moment she wondered what skinny dipping felt like. She imagined swimming and walking around in her new thong bikini, and with her right hand she felt her bare butt. All of that would be on display, with just a thin band running between her cheeks. She pulled her legs up and with a finger she traced the valley of her butt, down over the wrinkly skin – would it show around the thong if she were to bend over? Continuing along, she added a finger and teased her lips. She spent some time feeling down there to determine whether she needed to do some grooming before swimming, but it all felt smooth. Smooth and slippery by the time she was done.
Around nine, she showered, then dressed in yoga pants and a sweater, and went down to the kitchen. She saw Julia laying on the couch with a cup of coffee next to her. Julia looked like she might be asleep.
A notification sounded on her phone and she quickly put it on silent. She took her breakfast to her room to check her messages.
Cohen had messaged their group. ‘Family is dragging me off to visit my aunt. Can we move swimming to next week?’
Brian: ‘Next week is better for me as well.’
Sarah: ‘Okay, let’s go next week. Hey Mel, the boys need to be spanked for canceling on us,
don’t you think?’
Melanie quickly typed. ‘OMG’
A moment later Cohen messaged: ‘LOL’
Sarah: ‘I’m serious.’
Cohen: ‘I’ll be there in 10. Come Brian let’s see if she’s all talk or what.’
Sarah: ‘Mel, you coming too? Need additional hands.’
Melanie, shocked at how far they were taking this, decided to add some spice as well. ‘I’ll bring my paddle.’
Sarah: ‘Ooh where did I put mine?’
Having had enough, but giggling, Melanie put her phone down. With their swimming plans on hold, she felt the need to go for a run. After sending a message to Josy to let her know about the change of plans, she was wondering how Brian was doing, so she sent him a message.
‘How’s your leg?’
‘Healing, a bit bruised.’
‘Did you get it checked?’
‘Now you’re exaggerating.’
Melanie rolled her eyes. ‘How long till you feel good enough to go running?’
‘Maybe okay now, but I’ll wait a few days. Why? You going today?’
‘About to go.’ She felt her muscles charged up and ready, but since he couldn’t join, she didn’t want to seem too hyped for her run.
‘Ah. Have fun, but not too much.’
Melanie smiled at his joke. Of course she’d behave on her run. She’d felt bad for going without him. At least he was in a good mood. He’d been rather quiet in the group chat.
After her run, she stretched in her room followed by a quick shower. Remembering her promise to herself to not let Alani influence her clothing, she considered what to wear. She settled on her pastel blue lapel tunic that reached to mid-thigh. With its flaring skirt it resembled a short dress with long arms and a zipper in front. She often wore it with jeans. Feeling daring, she wore nothing under it. No panties or bra. The front zipper could be opened to just below her breasts, but she left it high enough to hide her bralessness. As long as her nipples behaved, they wouldn’t be visible through the heavy material. She wore soft grey knee-high socks with it.
Checking herself, she was happy with her choice. She picked up her homework and went to the common room, looking at the three couches and the two chairs for seating options.
Paige had joined Julia in the common room, using the second couch to lie down. That left the third couch and two chairs empty. Putting her homework aside for the moment, Melanie decided to lay down as well.
Julia looked up and whispered, “Hey, good morning. Paige is sleeping.”
Indeed, it appeared Paige was studying the inside of her eyelids, rather than the book resting on her stomach.
Melanie nodded, settling into the couch, also closing her eyes. She thought about her plans for the day. Since Josy hadn’t yet responded to her message, it probably meant she was sleeping in. Perhaps they could spend the afternoon together. Or, she could ask Brian if they might study together.
The doorbell rang and Julia got up. “It’s for me.” She went to open the door.
There was a guy’s voice and shortly after, Julia and a guy passed by the door to the common room. The guy looked in. “Hi,” he said before continuing on to Julia’s room.
“Huh, what?” Paige asked, stirring from her nap.
Melanie smiled at her reaction. “Just Julia and her boyfriend.”
“Ah. Oh, hey Melanie. Didn’t see you there.”
“You were catching a few more z’s.”
Paige looked at Melanie lying on the couch. “You know how it is. Sunday morning.” She pulled herself upright and off the couch. “Shower time,” she announced, yawning and stretching as she left the room.
Melanie closed her eyes again and was woken up by the sound of Paige returning. She checked the time, noticing that Josy had replied.
‘Ah that’s a shame. So we’re going next week?’
‘Looks like. Any plans for today?’
‘Mark’s coming home today. My parents asked me to come too.’
‘Ah, so swimming being canceled is a good thing?’
‘Haha, no I was looking forward to that.’
‘Want me to come with?’ Melanie asked. On the one hand she’d enjoy spending the day with Josy, but a family visit with the Walkers was not at the top of her list of favorite things.
‘No, it’s fine. I’ll go by myself. Unless you really want to see Mark.’
Melanie just sent a laugh emoji back.
‘Have fun today, Mel. Not just studying!’ Josy sent back.
Melanie went back to the common room to get going on her homework.
During the day, Melanie’s roommates came and went and as dinner time neared, Paige (who was cooking) and Elle were in the kitchen, and Melanie was watching a show with Reese. They were sitting next to each other, their backs to the kitchen area.
“Mel,” Reese began. “I know I shouldn’t, but I’ve been wondering all day…”
Having a suspicion what Reese was thinking about, Melanie said nothing to let the quiet girl continue.
“I like your socks,” Reese said in her soft voice. “Can I see them?” She shifted on the couch, away from Melanie, and then tapped the couch between them with her hand.
Melanie hesitated. Half turning, she glanced towards the kitchen. Paige and Elle were still busy cooking. Turning back to Reese, she considered the implications of indulging the ash blonde’s request. What would Josy think? Ah, Josy would tell her to do it…
Reese tapped the couch again. “Put your feet up.” Though still in the same soft voice, it held more strength this time.
Feeling tingles pass from her neck down her spine and over her arms, and a pleasant feeling in her tummy, Melanie shifted her right foot just a few inches. Then her left foot followed.
“Good,” Reese smiled at her. “Up here.” Another tap.
Lightheaded, Melanie turned her body, leaning sideways against the backrest. She bent her knees and lifted both feet at the same time, placing them on the couch between the two of them. With her knees and feet pressed together, she figured that Reese’s view between her legs was blocked.
Reese angled a bit towards Melanie. Reaching out with both hands, she touched Melanie’s feet. The two of them locked eyes momentarily. Reese, seemingly taking Melanie’s silence as a sign that she could continue, ran her hands up along Melanie’s knee high socks.
Melanie sat there, surprised that she was letting Reese do this, but entranced by the quiet girl’s influence over her. She had no idea why the strange touches and pulls on her socks were giving her pleasant tingles down her back, but she wanted it to continue.
When Reese took her right foot in both hands, she let it be lifted, even helped it along. It was placed back on the couch a few inches away from her left foot. Reese repeated the process for the other foot, moving it in the other direction. Apparently not yet satisfied, Reese moved Melanie’s right foot again, placing it against the back of the couch.
With the view no longer blocked, Melanie saw Reese’s gaze aimed between her legs, the girl’s characteristic gentle smile widening.
Reese looked up at Melanie’s eyes for a moment, before looking down again. “Just as I thought,” she whispered, making Melanie blush. “And she’s as pretty as I remembered.”
Feeling hot, Melanie shifted in her seat.
“No, stay like that,” Reese whispered. “We’ll have dinner soon.”
And she did. Melanie tried to watch the show, but her mind began to wander. Josy would be pushing her to go further. She let her right leg fall to the side to lay against the backrest, and the movement drew Reese’s attention. However, this move was allowed, judging from the smile on Reese’s face. So much more exposed – Josy would like that, just as Reese did.
Melanie continued to imagine herself next to Josy, with roommates nearby. Her arousal would build, sitting like that in the common room where anyone might walk up and see her. Her abdominal muscles tensed as she imagined how wet she’d become, and she felt a drop of her arousal running down over her perineum.
How would Josy react? Would she be pushing Melanie to touch herself right there on the couch? Her hand moved down to the hem that still rested on her raised thighs. Would she do it for Josy? She moved her hand past the hem, pushing it up her thighs, index finger closing to make contact.
Reese’s grin at the edge of Melanie’s vision made her quickly pull her hand away. She pressed her knees back together, though she left her feet where they were. Ashamed by her lapse in judgement in front of Reese, she shifted her focus to the show for a while, in full knowledge that Reese was looking at her smooth glistening pussy.
“Good show. Ready for dinner?” Elle asked, standing right behind the couch and looking at the T.V.
Startled, Melanie quickly pushed her feet off the couch, sitting up straight. “Be right there.” She felt her face burning in the uncertainty of whether she’d been caught by Elle. Melanie wasn’t sure, but judging from Elle’s lack of reaction, she hadn’t actually seen anything. Close call…
After Elle had walked back to the kitchen, Reese grinned. “I agree with Elle. Good show today.”
Melanie sensed the double entendre, and tried to think of a response. “Do you like the actress?”
Reese stood up, winking at Melanie. “I shouldn’t have taken your attention away from her.” She pointedly shifted her gaze to between Melanie’s legs.
As Reese walked to the kitchen area, Melanie was left to wonder what it would have been like if she hadn’t noticed the girl’s grin when she had been about to touch herself. She took a minute to try and calm down. When Julia came in with her boyfriend, Melanie stood up to join everyone at the table.
With seven people – six girls and one guy – it was crowded at the table, but they made it work. For the most part it was Alani, Paige and Julia talking, with some words from Julia’s boyfriend.
After dinner, Melanie went to her room. She couldn’t remember the name of Julia’s boyfriend. He seemed to be quite the catch, but she just hadn’t paid all that much attention.
A few hours later, Melanie got a message from Josy. She’d gotten back from her family visit and asked Melanie if she wanted to come over. Quickly packing an overnight bag and her book bag, she scurried out the door.
Shortly after, Melanie was in Josy’s room. After dropping her bags and slipping off her coat, she stood in front of Josy, still in her tunic and knee high socks.
Josy’s hand went to the zipper. “Is this what you wore today?”
Melanie followed Josy’s hand with her eyes. “It is.”
“I like the socks,” Josy continued, using almost the exact same words as Reese had used.
“I spent much of the day in our common room,” Melanie said, wondering why Josy hadn’t stripped her yet.
“Oh? And did you have fun like I told you to?” Josy lowered the front zipper all the way to the middle. The tunic fell open to reveal the curves of Melanie’s breasts.
Melanie nodded.
“No bra. Were you a good girl or a bad girl?” Josy’s hand went down Melanie’s stomach, brushing over her mound and stopping to pick at the hem.
“Ah, I suppose that depends,” Melanie said, feeling Josy’s hand reach under the hem, touching her thighs.
“You’re right,” Josy said. “It depends on one’s point of view.” She let go of the hem and took Melanie’s hand, guiding her to the bed. “Sit and tell me about the fun you had today.”
Keeping eye contact with Josy, Melanie carefully sat down, legs straight on the bed and leaning back on her elbows. She told Josy about her day, quickly moving on to what happened late afternoon with Reese. As she spoke about Reese getting her to put her feet on the couch, Melanie lifted her knees and spread her feet apart in a similar manner. When she mentioned how she had almost touched herself, imagining Josy would tell her to, she had to lower her gaze. She felt the heat in her face as she waited for Josy’s reaction.
Josy looked stern. “Good girl; you were thinking of me. But… you were also being bad.”
Melanie nodded and lowered her gaze, feeling hot even in just her tunic.
“You took it too far with Reese,” Josy admonished her. She lifted Melanie’s head with a finger under her chin. “But I’m not mad. I just…” Josy said, her expression changing into a grin as they again locked eyes. Turning away from the bed, Josy said, “It’s late… and we should go to sleep… but come.” She went to her door.
Wondering what Josy meant, Melanie got off the bed, zipped up her tunic, and followed Josy out and down to the common room.
Josy turned one of the lights back on and went to the couch area. Instead of sitting down, she waited for Melanie and then lowered the zipper again, saying, “Tsk tsk… Up.”
Melanie stood there, her eyes wide. Seeing Josy’s resolve, she cast a look towards the hallway before raising her arms. A shiver went through her as her tunic flowed up and off, leaving her naked out in the large open common room, except for her knee-high socks.
After Josy sat down, Melanie sat next to her, putting her feet up on the couch between them. She knew what Josy wanted and sat exactly like she had with Reese, her right leg resting against the backrest.
They sat there without saying anything, both clearly enjoying the moment, even though Melanie was on edge trying to listen for any sounds of activity from Josy’s roommates.
“There was one more thing,” Josy winked.
Melanie brought her hand down between her legs, with her finger an inch away.
Josy smiled, her eyes on Melanie’s finger. “Keep going.”
That’s not how it went with Reese, but Melanie kept quiet. Her own eyes locked on Josy and feeling hot, she dabbed at her clit ever so lightly. As Josy’s eyes sparkled her approval, Melanie began to run two fingers down over her right outer lip, but then heard the key in the front door.
“Shit,” Josy whispered, “hide.”
Melanie scrambled from the couch, hurriedly crawling to a position behind the couch furthest from the entrance, while the front door opened and closed. Peeking around the corner of the couch, she saw Josy stretched out on the couch they had been on with closed eyes. To her shock she saw her tunic on the floor, but there was no time for it. She sat back and tried to get her breathing under control.
Footsteps approached and then came into the common room. “Josy? Still awake?” a female voice asked, coming closer still.
Melanie tried to make herself as small as possible, expecting to be discovered at any moment. As good as naked in the common room. The fact that she could only wait and hope settled in her mind.
“Huh? Oh, hi Jess. I got home and laid down for a moment. You’re a lifesaver, waking me up.”
“You’re welcome,” Jess said with amusement in her voice. “What’s this?” Melanie’s heart skipped a beat. Had Jess noticed the tunic?
“Oh that. There was a stain, but I got it out.”
“You should hang it right away, or it’ll wrinkle.”
Melanie heard receding footsteps and the lights went out as the two girls left the room.
From down the hall around the corner Melanie heard Josy’s voice. “Good night Jess, and thanks.”
More footsteps, now in the hallway, then two doors opened and closed. Melanie waited another minute to make sure no one would be returning. Peeling her bare butt off the floor, she got on all fours and crawled around the couches towards the door. As expected, her tunic was gone. She heard a noise from one of the rooms, and froze in place. Finally, she stood up and tiptoed to Josy’s room, opening the door as quietly as she could and slipping inside.
Josy was waiting for her, seeming to be relieved, but then grinning. “That was awesome. Did you enjoy that?”
Melanie shook her head, but knew her expression was giving her away.
Josy thought for a moment. “Jess will probably figure it out if she hears us go to the bathroom.”
“Ah, all I need is to brush my teeth.” Melanie said.
Josy had that glint in her eye. “I’ll go to the bathroom, while you go brush your teeth in the kitchen. It’ll be fine.” She winked. “You don’t need that,” she added when Melanie went to grab her tunic.
Melanie wanted to protest, but saw Josy’s face. Sighing, she nodded. This might actually be fun, seeing how she was still reved up.
Josy opened the door and as she went towards the bathroom, Melanie went to the kitchen. She tried to brush her teeth quietly. Another door opened. Melanie held still and heard the bathroom door opening, then voices and the door closing again. That was close.
As Melanie was rinsing, she heard another door opening. She froze, quickly turning off the faucet. Not the bathroom door. Approaching footsteps. Thinking fast, Melanie hurried as quietly as she could back to the couch she’d hidden behind earlier, sitting on the floor with her back against it, hugging her knees to her chest.
A moment later the light came on.
“Hello?” Someone asked. A girl, but Melanie wasn’t sure who.
Footsteps towards the kitchen, while Melanie tried to stay as quiet as possible. She bit her lip and held her breath. How would she explain sitting there in the dark, naked except for her socks?
“Hmmm.”
The footsteps approached the couch area, coming closer and closer.
Suddenly there was giggling above her. Melanie covered her face with her hands, peeking out between her fingers as she glanced up.
“Melanie? What are you doing here?” Sophia asked.
Both shocked at being discovered and relieved that it was Sophia, Melanie shushed her.
Sophia picked up on Melanie’s request, crouched down next to her, and whispered, “Where’s Josy?”
“Ah, in the bathroom with Jess.” Melanie relaxed a little.
“So you decided to brush your teeth in the kitchen?” Sophia appeared amused.
Melanie nodded. That sounded better than Josy deciding it for her.
“And Jess doesn’t know.”
Melanie just stared back.
“I’m still the only one that knows?” Sophia asked, smiling. “I interrupted you, didn’t I?”
Melanie looked away and nodded.
“Come, you can finish up. I’ll keep watch and pretend it’s me if someone comes.” She stood up, reaching out a hand to Melanie.
Though reluctant to yet again show Sophia full frontal nudity, Melanie took the proffered hand and rose from her hiding place. She went back to the kitchen to finish rinsing her mouth as the other girl followed.
As Melanie was leaning forward over the counter, Sophia whispered close behind her, “Tight butt.”
After she finished, she turned back to Sophia to see the girl grinning. “Ah, thank you… I guess.”
“Do you have your phone with you?”
Melanie held up her hands, showing her toothbrush and toothpaste.
“Ah, that’s a shame.”
“Uhm, can you please not tell Josy about catching me here?”
“Why? I mean, okay. Will you bring your phone to breakfast tomorrow?”
Melanie felt herself blushing, but nodded.
Together they walked out of the common room, Sophia turning off the lights. After a silent ‘bye’, Melanie went into Josy’s room. A few minutes later, Josy was back as well.
“What are you doing to me, Josy?”
“It’d be easier if you’d let me tell everyone you’re a nudist.”
“Isn’t Sophia enough?” Melanie asked. Seeing Josy’s surprise at her question, she added, “I mean all the kitchen antics.”
Josy put her finger to her chin in mock thought. “Hmm…”
Melanie decided to quickly move on. “Good thing you enjoyed that, because I get to pick what you wear to bed.”
Josy’s eyes went wide. “Just a top? You’re going to hold me to that?”
“I have to,” Melanie said. “And you can’t hold it against me either. You promised. At the store.”
“I did, didn’t I? Okay fine, but go easy on me.”Josy crossed her arms over her chest, but her nerves gave her away.
Melanie smiled.
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I guess everyone expected some exciting day out swimming. But it turned out to be a relatively quiet day for Melanie. But not that quiet, she had some fun with Reese, which was still very exciting. I like how the plot changes from some very public shenanigans to some more private fun. This development feels just natural or realistic; it is not that the story escalates more and more from one chapter to the other.
It is very interesting to see how Melanie’s relationship with other characters develops. Especially in this chapter with Reese, who even with her soft voice has some kind of power over Mel. I think I already mentioned before that I quite like Melanie’s submissive side.
No delinquent nipples today?
That’s a cute reaction, if she covers her face, no one will see her… Especially not the rest of her almost nude body.
Now Josy gets a taste of her own medicine. I guess, or hope she will like it, eventually. No wonder that Melanie has to smile.
Reese’s interactions with Mel are something different.
Apparently not, but I hope you like the tunic she was wearing.
Now I’m curious. Do you guess or hope, or both?
Thank you for your comment!
Now I am even more curious.
Well behaved nipples are fine 😉, and I love her tunic!
Sorry, I should have written: I hope she will like it, eventually. (I decided to stop guessing, I keep getting it wrong 😊.)
Another great chapter
Thank you, Chris. Glad you liked it.
Nice chapter. I liked the parts about her normal life at the beginning. Nice scene with Reese and with Josy afterward. Now Mel gets to turn the tables a little.
Normal life for a normal girl. I’m trying to put a bit more of the normal life in the story, without getting in the way of story progress.
Now, what will Mel do with that opportunity?
Thank you for your comment.
Marvellous!! and just like the kiss a few chapters ago, the perfect cliffhanger.
Ah, the (almost) kiss. This cliffhanger might be a little different, but I’m glad you approve!
It’s nice to see several characters assisting Josy in getting Melanie used to be (partial) nude in public, although the public can be one person only.
That’s a supportive environment with positive nudging. Josy deserves a commendation for having Melanie twice nude (except for the knee-high socks) in the kitchen without major repercussions (being mad at Josy, departing, getting dressed or any of this), only noticing some reluctance to acknowledge that she actually enjoyed it.
The society expectations are still engraved deep within Melanie and it will take careful and loving exercises from Josy’s part for Melanie to loose not only her clothes regularly but also loose the burden of what society expects from her in her mind. I have no doubt Cave has a number of these ‘exercises’ planned for future episodes.
By giving this token of retribution to Melanie, Josy is giving the clear signal that Melanie is in control, and that the relation between them is still between two consenting adults who have no power of authority over another.
While that may legally be true (there is no formal relation in which the one can grade the other at the university) the ‘social credits’ between these BFF’s steer into one person discovering nudity as an arousing element and the other person gladly assisting in that journey and finding personal satisfaction in having her friend in these situations.
I just wonder if Josy – being a young adult – in her eagerness might overstep her playfull authority and alienates Melanie because of that. After all, these are not old and wise persons (not meaning that all old people are wise or vice versa) so clumsy mistakes might happen.
I liked the chapter very much and of course the direction that Melanie is willingly to go.
Barometer
Hi Barometer,
I agree, Josy needs to get some sort of reward for her efforts. She works hard to give Melanie the opportunity to express herself freely.
Yes, mistakes might happen, and they have already happened. So far they have managed to navigate their way through the mistakes they have made, but it is the reality of life that it’s not always so easy.
Thank you, I enjoyed hearing your thoughts and am glad you liked the chapter.
Best,
Cave
I’m looking forward to the swimming but it’s hard to imagine what it would be like for Melanie. Even Melanie was wondering about that.
Haha… they are texting about spanking Cohen and Melanie types ‘I’ll bring my paddle’. Playful banter, yes, but we never could have imagined such words coming from Melanie.
It’s good that Brian is still in the picture. We are glad that Josy ‘won’ but as we can see things are never simple. I also like these realistic little lulls between action that keep the story grounded nicely.
I’m kinda curious what that visit might have been like. Things are certainly different now and so how would Josy behave in her parent’s place with Mark and Melanie there?
I don’t get it. Why is Reece so influential? What is it about her? I’m pretty sure if Reese wanted to see my socks too, I’d be putty in her hands.
And we all just follow along, enjoying the ride.
A perfect paragraph. (Above)
The reader also, we want it to continue. Not too fast, not too slow. This intense, enchanting scene was so well written. But it was risky, so I was relieved about Josy’s reaction.
Oh oh…
And here we learn about who ‘really’ has influence over Melanie.
I really like knee-high socks for some unknown reason. It was awesome to see Josy have a turn with Mel in the common room, and I love what followed after that. It’s cool that they are comfortable to play around like this and that Sophia is now privy to the antics. The circle grows. It’s a subtle thing, but significant and enjoyable.
All these little escalations are adding up and it’s wonderful.
I love how this is occasionally mentioned and I really liked how this chapter ended with the tables turning on Josy. This was a wonderful chapter, rich with many subtle developments that have us hungering for more!
Hi ReaderMan,
Well, it’s only delayed by a week, so Melanie doesn’t have to wait very long to find out.
It’s good to know the normal life parts of the story are well received. I feel they are necessary to, as you say, keep the story grounded.
A visit with Josy’s family, possibly with Mark as well, is likely to happen sooner or later. However, in terms of chapters, it might be a long way off. Indeed, it would be interesting to see how it would go.
😉
It is wonderful to hear your moment to moment thoughts on the Reese scene.
Reese, Josy, Sophia, everyone does.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me.
Best,
Cave
Cool Story I like that also other ones involved this time I mean the other girls not only josy very good story like the submissive side.
The circle grows! Thank you for your comment.
Excellent, well done Cave. It is hotly written, especially the end of the chapter. I like it. Only when Melanie was in the kitchen to brush her teeth should there already be some kind of lighting. It is difficult to apply toothpaste to a toothbrush in complete darkness. I checked. The noise of the water and the lighting must be there, and the abrupt cessation of that must have caught Sophia’s attention. Also Sophia could add “or now, I can wait” it would be fun to know Melanie’s reaction.
People also tend to think about some situations that have happened or will happen. They thereby make these problems dense, serious. What will he do, what will she answer, and what will I say then, etc. And Josy’s playful attitude towards them makes getting over them good and funny.
Brian seems like an asshole to me, refusing to meet such a girl, although he crawls on porn sites.
But still, you’re great. Perhaps there will be more nudity the next morning. I am impatiently waiting for the continuation.
Hi pavel_ser,
You are absolutely correct! Though the lights were off, it is not complete darkness. Perhaps there was a small beam of light from outside coming in through a gap in the curtains that Melanie used, or maybe Melanie turns on the kitchen counter light. I might make a small edit to add this to the story.
This is very much in line with Sophia’s character, but she might hesitate to say it, not sure what Josy would think about that.
If not the next morning, perhaps later in the week. It does seem inevitable, doesn’t it?
Thank you,
Best,
Cave
Cave,
It’s always such a pleasure to visit Melanie in her world. It’s a world where nothing really bad happens (at least not so far). Maybe someone like Brian gets a boo-boo, but it heals relatively quickly. And, for the most part, people are nice. Especially Melanie.
That’s of course not a very significant moment. It’s just Mel being nice — genuinely interested in Sarah’s bikini selection.
That’s Sarah being nice back. I get the feeling that she wouldn’t have actually bought a thong. She’s just trying to be supportive. She doesn’t want Melanie to feel out of place for her selection.
Wavy Line! (because that’s what I drew under it on my printout) In short, well written. Very few words conveying a lot — a lot of fun! (for Melanie and for us)
Boy, does Brian have her number.
Yep, someone’s still on the slippery slope.
Wavy Line! Nicely worded.
I can’t believe I got all the way through college without learning that if I complimented a woman’s socks, she might show me her pussy. If only I’d known!This scene, possibly one of the best ever. Melanie turning on the couch, letting Reese shift her legs apart. I haven’t read the other comments, but I have to think that everyone liked this. Reese looking, Melanie letting her.
Oh, Melanie! Are you really that naïve? (and yet I think you might be)
It’s so ‘Melanie’ that Melanie checks in with her girlfriend (is that what she is?) at several points during this scene. It seems clear to me that Reese is cheating on her girlfriend, and yet Melanie feels the opposite — that she herself is doing what Josy would have her do. And she’s probably right. Josy seems to have a problem with Melanie being intimate with others, but displaying herself? Josy seems to green light that. I got a kick out of the TWO double entendres. That was a nice moment. But these girls are all college students. One can appreciate that they are quick on their feet, verbally speaking.
Nice! ‘Nuff said.
And it was so fun that Josy had Melanie re-enacting the scene (the one with Reese). And I liked that Josy took it up a notch by having her do it without the tunic. Melanie in just the knee socks — that’s surely a sight to behold! Why does it seem as if a girl in socks such as these (or tights) is even more naked than a completely naked girl? I honestly don’t know, but it does.And then, just when it seemed as if we’d had more fun than we (we readers) deserve, Melanie ends up nude behind the couch TWICE! You’re spoiling us Cave!
Exactly! What are you doing to me, Cave?
Boy are you ever good at writing YOUNG and FUN!
Best,
Blair
Hi Blair, thank you for your comment. It took me a while to get back to this, due to a tumultuous week. This and the other wonderful comments have helped me get through it.
🙂
Maybe, or she would genuinely like to try it out. While it’s not that difficult to add tone and intention to text, or at least hint at it, in this case it was left to the reader’s interpretation. However, in the absence of this information, we’re left with nothing but considering how Melanie seemed to have taken Sarah’s remark.
In a way, we’re spying on Melanie, who’s having a private moment in her own bed, by herself…
Ah, it may be a special talent only reserved to a very small number of individuals, and only working on even fewer individuals. Then again, you’ll never know until you try.
Do you know or guess all the factors at play, I wonder?
She’s done that before. Hopefully there’s enough of a difference for it to not feel like a repeat of the previous time. I feel that it’s different, yet springs from the same motive.
I try.
Best,
Cave
Hi everyone, thank you for your wonderful comments. Due to personal circumstances it will take me a little longer to respond to each of you, but I have read them and very much appreciate you taking the time to let me know what you thought of the chapter.
This was such a delightful chapter. Well done dear author. It’s delicious how well Melanie’s march towards total nudity continues. You have such descriptive flair that I have begun expecting it from everyone now.Melanie and Josy’s relationship is moving very slowly though. Can it pick up some steam please?Reese and Sarah understand Melanie perfectly. The scene with Reese and Melanie was so hot. Bloody hell!More, dear author. More.Cheers
Hi Mort,
I agree … a delightful chapter.
Again, we agree.
I guess our agreement ends there. This story is so good as is. Part of what sets it apart is that some aspects move at an unexpected pace — which to my mind is quite realistic. A component of that is the “descriptive flair” you mention. This chapter spanned a very short period of time. In other words, the Melanie – Josy relationship IS moving along. Note all that happened in just one day.
In short, I think that we fans will get the best story if we allow (and encourage) Cave to march to her own drum, to tell the story as she imagines it.
Blair
Hi Blair,
I’m quite happy with how the story is progressing. Just hankerin’ for some Melanie/Josy action. lol
Mort
Mort,
No issues. And maybe we both are (not sayin’ … lol). I’m just mindful that this is Cave’s first story. I can tell she values comments (I imagine all authors do). I just don’t want her to view it as dissatisfaction, nor do I want to see the direction of the story influenced. I guess it’s a fine line.
Best Regards,
Blair
Indeed, it’s my first story. I’m still learning the art of storytelling, and enjoying the experience. That said, I appreciate thoughts, feedback and ideas, though the main story direction is not something that can be influenced. As for the pace of the story, I strongly feel the desire to progress, but often more time (and words) than expected is spent outside of the main story arc.
In short, I value both your perspectives on the story direction and pace, and hope you continue to feel free to share them with me (and other readers).
Hi Mort, thank you for sharing your thoughts. The relationship between Melanie and Josy seems to be progressing slowly, but there is more than one reason for it. One of them, as Blair menioned already, is that only very little time has passed the last few chapters. That’s on the writer, due to being distracted with writing out different scenes. Another reason is waiting for the next chapter. Unfortunately, I have not been able to focus on writing the past week, but hopefully that changes again soon.
Glad you enjoyed the Reese scene 🙂
Best,
Cave
I love this story and look forward to it continuing!
I’m also looking forward to the next chapter. But no pressure!