Read the next story in this series: Allegra and the Mean Girls (L)
Gabi has another story offsite Gabi’s Boxing Lesson
This is a very old story that appeared on NerveExplosion’s BP forum. It has been revised and cleaned up. For those familiar with the “Sarah Series” this is no longer part of it.
Road Rage by CountryMouse
Gabi’s pink BMW stopped suddenly as it impacted with the old yellow VW in front of her. The blonde lurched forward slightly, cursing as she messed up her lipstick. She sighed in frustration realizing the accident was going to cause her to be late for the basketball game.
Gabi got out of the car and adjusted her clothes. She wore a tight crop top with one shoulder cut out and one long black sleeve. The hem ended just above the girl’s belly button and her skirt rode low on her hips giving a hint of her delicious, tanned abs. The cheer top was red with black trim and had “Bearcats” emblazoned on the front. Her stretchy tube skirt was only eight inches long and showed off more leg and hip than any mother would approve of.
“Fuck!” she muttered under her breath when she saw that the driver she hit was also a woman. The girl, Bryanne, was about Gabi’s age, early twenties, and was very likely a student from the same school. If it were a guy, Gabi could cry her way out of it, maybe have to let him buy her dinner. Straight men were powerless against Gabi’s toothy smile. Women wouldn’t fall for that bullshit though.
The best she could hope for is that Bryanne would be reasonable. The blonde cheerleader threw her hands up “It’s okay. I have insurance. It’s not a big deal.”
Bryanne was taller than Gabi and rail-thin, a knockout if she applied herself. Her face screwed up in rage. “What do you mean it’s not a big deal you Bitch? You were putting on makeup, and you destroyed my rear end!”
“You wish!” The blonde said suppressing an inappropriate giggle. She forced herself to look serious, “But it’s just a junky old car. You don’t even have to repair it… Ugn!”
Bryanne hauled off and slapped the dumb blonde before she could finish. The sound echoed out into the street, which was starting to fill with excited bystanders and people watching in cars. Golden-yellow hair flew everywhere, and Gabi staggered a few steps after it.
When Gabi caught her bearings, she turned around and walked right into another vicious open palm from Bryanne. This one spun her around completely. The girl staggered drunkenly, desperate to keep her feet underneath her. Gabi stumbled right…
… then left till she ran headlong into her own car, bounced off of it, spun again then fell on her ass. The Cheerleader teared up as she held her burning cheek. Bryanne was a champion slapper. Her cheek stung like hell, but she was careful not to hit her ear so that Gabi wouldn’t miss out on the gathering crowd laughing at her clumsy pratfall.
“You Bitch!” The humiliation drove Gabi to stupidity. She jumped up, still holding her stinging face, and went for Bryanne’s hair. The girls dug their hands into each other’s manes wrestling and cussing but not really doing any damage to each other. This went on for a few seconds till Bryanne thumped a quick hard punch into the blonde’s tight stomach.
Everyone heard the thud and there was a shared gasp. Gabi had a strong core but Bryanne had caught her by surprise. At first, it didn’t register with Gabi, but then there was a deep ache in her guts. Her diaphragm was seized up and she couldn’t breathe in. The blonde was dizzy and disoriented, stumbling around like a drunk, hunched over holding her belly. She couldn’t move or breathe or find the floor with her feet. Gabi lifted her head, her blue eyes wide, mouth open, curls of blonde hair falling across her face.
“Hey!” Gabi complained as Bryanne yanked her cheer shirt up over her face. She could feel the cold air breeze across her exposed stomach as she struggled blindly. Gabi was a hard-bodied little thing. Starting as a power gymnast and changing to cheerleading when she didn’t qualify for the national team.
“Eek!” Gabi cried out as she felt Bryanne’s hand manipulate the snap and zipper of her skirt. Another tug and the skirt slid down Gabi’s athletic legs to her ankles.
Somewhere beyond the darkness, there was an eruption of applause as the blonde cheerleader was stripped to her bikini underwear. She had a natural hourglass figure, with big boobs, wide hips, and a tiny wasp-waist. Gabi was still a dedicated gym bunny and had a truly bangin’ body as a result.
Gabi was both mortified and flattered by the catcalls. She stumbled and kicked but Bryanne had a hold of her shirt and her arms were pinned above her head. Bryanne slammed the blonde against the BMW and dug her fist into the girl’s hard abs.
“Let go of me… Ugn!!” The heavy car behind her prevented any give so her gut absorbed the punch full force. Gabi lifted an athletic leg in defense but it was slapped away and followed up by another uppercut to her belly. “Oof!”
“I hate you fucking cheerleader sluts!” Bryanne barked.
“Oh, one of those girls! I’m in trouble…” Gabi guessed Bryanne was one of those kids that prettier girls like Gabi picked on in grade school. Bryanne seemed hell-bent on beating out years of bitterness on her. Not that she could do anything about it. After delivering several punishing body blows Bryanne whipped Gabi’s shirt completely off and dragged her by the hair into the street.
The blonde bombshell shuffled after her assailant, wishing she could have worn a bra with that skimpy top. Gabi did a quick inventory check. Yeah, she was topless alright. She glanced around. About a dozen lucky men, women, and children were getting quite a show. In fact, it was stopping traffic.
“Ulf!” Bryanne hooked under her arms under her victim’s shoulders and brutally lifted her knee up into Gabi’s vulnerable stomach bringing her to her toes. Her big blue eyes blinked, and she grunted deeply. The next knee that violated her poor belly made Gabi hop off the ground a little. “Ulf!”
A half dozen gut-wrenching knees brought them back to Gabi’s BMW. Bryanne set her ragdoll straight and drove home an old 1-2 “Oof! Ooh!”
She tossed the girl onto the hood of the car. The blonde bombshell lay on her back, spread eagle sobbing for breath. Bryanne went to Gabi’s car and stole her keys, cash, and phone. Of course, the dumbass didn’t have a password on her phone. She used Gabi’s phone to snap several full-frontal pictures of her. Sending them to everyone on the girl’s contact list. She noted that they were real, and they were spectacular.
Then she threw the girl’s clothes and belongings into the trunk of Gabi’s luxury car and slammed it closed. Blondie was going to have a hard time getting home. Bryanne jumped back into her VW bug without leaving her insurance information.
It was not a big deal. Just a fender bender…
Read the next story in this series: Allegra and the Mean Girls (L)
Gabi has another story offsite Gabi’s Boxing Lesson
Ahh… I see what you mean about the punching. Yes, you are good at girl brawls.
I liked the contrasting characterization in this sentence.
Lots of action and passion as usual, keeps the story moving at a great pace. This is a perfect example of a fun, semi-dark story. Fun because the main character is somewhat deserving, and the person she runs into is a badass. Well done.
You could just slip a little (D) there into the chapter name and call it a contest entry. You could be the first! Or it could be an (L) if you so desire. That decision is always up to the writer.
what do all the letters D, BP etc in the title stand for?
Hey sw.
The (D) is for the dark/light contest.
The others are story tags to give you a heads up on the content in case it’s not your thing. BP= Belly Punching, ENF= Embarrassed Nude Female.
I am happy to say, that the (D) means this is our very first entry into the ‘Dark vs Light’ = writing contest.
Dear Countrymouse,
First and foremost, I admire the technical quality (spelling, grammar, vocabulary, presentation) of this story. I makes me a little bin envious tbh. That should motivate to become better myself.
Again I learned a lot. First about shared cultural tropes.
Of course I know what cheerleaders are and what they do… ok… I kinda know. Cheerleaders were copied here in Europe to promote American sports like Basketball and American Football (who stay very niche).
So… The concept of cheerleaders and the sujet of the mean cheerleader who ought to be punished resonated with me on an indirect, intellectual level. But my heart wasn’t really in it.
Secondly about myself. Somebody just attacked by somebody else (even if it kinda was deserved) does in itself nothing for me. I take my entertainment and arousal primarily from the arousal of the characters involved (another thing I learned while analysing my reactions on the resort ambassador) . Maybe it would be somewhat different if I had had myself my fair share of unpleasant encounter with cheerleading bitches through my formative years and could relish a sort of vicariously lived revenge… maybe… very maybe…
So albeit the story was nice to read from a anthropologic point of view…
DUD for me. And the problem was on my end, not on yours.
grumpyoldum,
Hey, it’s not everybody’s thing. I posted it to gauge this audience more than anything.
Your observations about the stigma of cheerleaders being “mean girls” is dead on. Though really cheerleaders can be serious athletes at a high level.
For me, the gut-punching thing is more about girls doing girly things and not about them really being hurt. The look of surprise, the moaning, kneeling on the ground holding their belly, that sort of thing.
Very fair review thank you.
I probably won’t post those types of stories here anymore. Trying to go down a different path. I’ve decided to store my old BP stories on bpstoryarchive along with work from other authors that have been offline for several years.
Hello countrymouse, I never intended to discourage you from sharing your BP-stuff here.
I just like to explain, why I like some stuff more then others to help them understand why I and readers with similar preferences prefer some stuff above other stuff.
I could very much imagine BP-scenario’s that very much would arouse me. Just that this setting could not. I’m quite sure that other readers will absolutely feeling things differently then myself.
My feedback doesn’t in any way mean that BP can’t (or shouldn’t) be posted here. ENF can be combined with a lot of different aspect. I even think that ENF SHOULD be combined with a lot of them, because I (again very personal) find ENF without additional flavours can be rather dull.
grumpyolddom says:
Curious as a writer to know what scenarios would you be into?
I believe this got taken out of context. The main reason I included some interactive parts of my recent Gerard stories was to engage the audience, but also to see if it was okay to throw in a punch here and there. I wouldn’t want to flood a site with content that turns them away. People said go for it, so I gave it a whole BP section, though I actually liked the wrestling part the most. You guys have been pretty open to my writing and I appreciate it and am not going anywhere.
I mention the new site because there used to be a message board that collected a lot of good stories. It was taken down a few years ago, and readers have been wanting it back. Nobody has done it yet, so I’m doing it. If you are interested in reading my older work, it’s there.
Thank you!
From introspection my arousal comes from the charaters, especially the “victims” arousal. It’s how BDSM-doms are wired and what’s differentiate us BDSM-Doms from psycopaths. So as the practices I do in real life couldn’t arouse me if my “victim” wasn’t aroused by these practices. I’m not aroused if the victim isn’t aroused.
That’s the key… arousal. You could imagine a story where somebody behaves like a brat and provocates situations where she is punched. You could imagine somebody who is secretly masochistic and “let somebody bully him/her” a lot of shades of grey are possible here. A very dark setting could be somebody who get’s bullied and feels pain and humiliation for it but feels something more and goes back for more hating him/herself for it without really understanding it.
What does it for me is what’s happening in the “victims” head. The act of the punch in itself does very little for me. But that isn’t only so for BP… most practices do in themself very little for me the important thing is what they “do with the victim”. So that’s the rule, not the exception.
Yes, the rule here is to only post stories we have written ourselves. Which I hope that you continue to do. That said, it’s also interesting that you are sharing this archive. I read a few of these stories by other authors on your archive and with some I see there tends be less emphasis on stripping, and a bit more on belly blows. Lordy, its really is a thing! That’s interesting. Still our NFIC site here celebrates all forms of ‘creative writing related to nudity’ and your writing is strong, and your forced nudity is delicious. So I hope you keep posting your versions of BP stories here. But you can also advertise your own site by signing the bottom of each of your BP stories with your name and a link to your site.
CountryMouse (admin of the bpstoryarchive) Where you can find more (BP) bellypunching focused stories.
BP stories are perfectly fine here CountryMouse. This is a board of many tastes. Subjective opinions are fun, but the purpose of this site isn’t to cater to the fetishes of any one person in particular. More important is writing style above all else and that each writer feel comfortable and ‘feels safe’ to post anything they like that doesn’t violate the board rules. And you have that nailed CountryMouse. I’m sure Grumpy wasn’t trying to scare you off or deprive our board of your BP talents. He just likes to give detailed feedback. I didn’t even know BP was a thing. Please keep posting and don’t you dare go away! We are an open site that celebrates many different writing styles. We can write cold, we can write fun or warm, with stereotypes or not, we can write cryptically or non-consensually. Most important, above all, we don’t try to scare away talent or classify the board as just for a super specific thing. This is a creative writing site for naked fiction and we celebrate as much topic, style and content diversity as humanly possible under that very wide and warmly accommodating umbrella.
Thanks GumpyOldDom. Yes, there is too much emphasis of BP in this conversation. This is really just catfights with girl on girl, ripping off clothing in public. OON (or both sometimes). Embarrassment/humiliation, forced exposure… ie: ‘The good stuff’. A side thing is some revenge or comeuppance, which is also a strong theme in ENF sometimes – and something I enjoy reading. So it’s all good. CountryMouse is a master of these elements. But more than that, CountryMouse is a master of the written sentence itself.