It was a long and restless night. Emi was laying on top of the covers, naked. She was on her stomach, no longer feeling the need to use her blanket as it was warm. Her legs were open and one knee was hiked up obscenely high. Refusing to fully wake, Emi clutched her fluffy pillow, squeezing it. She knew that she had to wake up, but she needed just a few more minutes.
A knocking at her door caused her head to pop up suddenly. The door was unlocked. It started to open. Before Emi could think she threw herself off the far side of the bed and hid by the floor.
“Emi?” It was Becca’s voice.
“I’m here she said,” popping her head up from behind the bed. “I was just ahh… picking up my pillow,” she said, embarrassed about having been startled.
Becca smiled that annoying knowing smile. She had a bottle of mineral spirits in her hands and held it out to Emi over the bed. “I thought you might like to remove the last traces of your ‘nines’ before meeting the guys today.”
“Oh yes, that’s a great idea!” Emi leaned over the bed and took the bottle. “Thank you,” she said, bowing appreciatively. She didn’t like that the door was wide open.
“You have morning hair. Let’s go get you cleaned up. Today is your big day, right?”
Emi nodded, wishing she could just go back to sleep but Becca was right. Better to be prepared than not. Not that she had much to prepare. But it would be nice to remove the last traces of those nines. Reluctantly, she followed Becca out into the hallway. She wasn’t quite awake yet and felt unguarded and raw as her bare feet padded along. It didn’t help that her hair was messy. Only a lover should see her this way. Once again, she started to regret this whole Resort Ambassador decision. She sighed, wishing the world would just all go away.
Becca was walking in front of her looking not at all like a Resort Ambassador. She was wearing khaki shorts and a t-shirt. Her short reddish hair was perfect. It seemed as if she had done a full reversal on the Resort Ambassador stuff. Emi didn’t like that.
In the distance, she could hear a radio playing. Lucy appeared from the far room and began dusting along the walls almost dancing like she was in a musical. Her ribbons on her shoes and pigtails matched, as usual. Today they were blue. She stood up tall and proud wearing only her regulation loincloth. As Emi and Becca passed, she spun around, snapping to attention while saluting, as if Emi were a supreme commander. Her exposed smallish breasts bouncing at the sudden movement.
Emi smiled at her antics as they walked past.
Up ahead she saw Bo mopping the floor. He didn’t say anything but nodded and smiled as she walked past. The supportive gestures from Lucy and Bo somehow made her feel a little better.
They rounded a corner and came face to face with Sam and Hannah.
Sam stopped. “Hi Becca. I like your outfit,” she said, ignoring Emi. It was obviously a dig at Emi’s lack of clothing.
Emi saw that Sam was wearing oversized shorts and had a black bandanna on her head and a red tank top. Hannah was in her usual kaleidoscope swimsuit. She was glad that Hannah at least was semi-supportive.
“Thanks, Sam,” Becca answered, trying to move past the girls.
“What’s that?” Hannah asked looking at the bottle in Becca’s hands.
Becca held the bottle up. “Just something to help Emi remove the nines. She needs to clean up before she meets the guys.”
Hannah, shifted uncomfortably while looking at her feet. “Sorry, Emi. I kind of got carried away… I mean, I was kind of drunk when I was drawing those nines on you.”
Sam shook her head in amazement. “No amount of money could get me to mentor a group of guy devs with my pussy flapping in the breeze.”
Emi winced at the crude comment.
“I’ll help,” Hannah blurted out suddenly. “This is my fault and I can help make her look dazzling”, she said, patting her every handy hip bag.
Emi didn’t want them to fuss over her. It was embarrassing, considering her lack of clothes.
“Have fun,” Sam said, walking away. “I’m going to add some unit tests to cover yesterday’s changes.”
Becca walked into the large washroom. Emi was following, but stopped, remembering a couple more tests that Sam needed to cover, she mentioned them quickly to Sam.
“Okey-dokey,” Sam said, without looking back.
Emi stood there watching her walk away. She was glad that Sam wasn’t being overly troublesome today. This was a critical week before opening day and she needed the team firing on all cylinders.
She felt Hannah’s hand in the center of her back, gently pushing.
Emi hesitated, lost in thought about everything that needed to be done that week.
“Let’s go, Emi,” Hannah said, leaning close to her ear. “Unless you want the boys to meet Nine?”
Emi ignored the taunt. “Have you finished all the UX testing? That was supposed to be done yesterday, right? We need time to make corrections.”
“Ahhh… almost?” Hannah said, fidgeting.
Emi nodded and then entered the washroom, mentally making adjustments to the timeline as Hannah obviously needed more time… Becca was waiting with some facecloths by the sink. Hannah followed her in.
Emi hesitated when she stood before Becca. “I can do this, you guys can…”
Hannah pulled out her hairbrush, washing it in the sink.
“How’s the timeline looking?” Becca asked, splashing something on a cloth. She started rubbing Emi’s left arm with it.
Emi thought about the timeline as Hannah started brushing her hair. “Other than Hannah being somewhat behind on the UX testing, I think we are doing okay.”
“I’ll get right on that after I finish up here,” Hannah said, as she pulled out her mini scissors and snipped some hair behind Emi’s ear.
Emi was surprised to be suddenly losing little bits of hair, but she trusted Hannah. She often trimmed Sam’s hair and it usually ended up looking very nice.
“It’s working,” Becca said as she turned Emi sideways so she could see her shoulder no longer had a faint nine on it. That was a relief.
“Don’t move her, I almost cut an ear off.”
Emi tried to keep still while they worked on her.
“Done, what do you think Becca?”
Becca nodded, smiling her approval as she wet her cloth with the bottle.
Emi turned her head to look into the mirror and was relieved to see that she did in fact, look better.
“Your hair looks awesome,” Hannah said proudly.
While she was distracted with the mirror, Emi felt Becca rubbing on the nine just above her left breast. It almost seemed inappropriate but it was well above her nipple, so it was probably okay.
Hannah started rubbing a cloth on her ass, which made Emi gasp a little.
“Relax, Nine, we are all girls here,” Hannah laughed, as she rubbed the cloth hard on Emi’s rear.
Emi was about to protest when Liz burst into the room. “Woah, Emi…” She said, laughing.
“Don’t make her feel uncomfortable Liz,” Hannah said, rubbing harder, causing Emi to shake a little.
Emi felt embarrassed to be caught like this, but it was all innocent enough. “Hi Liz… just removing the nines,” she said, trying to laugh it off.
“Oh great, I want to help too!” Liz said, grabbing a cloth.
Emi really didn’t want a third person touching her naked body, but maybe it would help get this over with sooner.
“Use this,” Hannah said. Giving her the cloth she was using. “Take over for me,” I just noticed I missed a spot with the trimming.
Becca started rubbing Emi’s upper chest harder. “This part is getting there, but it’s not coming off easily. You might be a little red for a while,” she said while Liz gleefully took over for Hannah on Emi’s ass.
Emi knew the rubbing shouldn’t feel intimate, but it kind of did. Why was she letting them do this?
“What will you teach the devs today?” Becca asked, trying to distract her.
Emi was thankful for the question. She needed to think about something else.. “I ahh… was thinking to start with…” she felt Hannah clamp an arm around her legs, holding Emi steady as she squatted down and started snipping away with the scissors around her runway.
Emi gasped. “Wait… not there!”
“Relax, I’m not even touching you and I’m almost done,” Hannah said as she trimmed some stray black pubes making things look a little neater.
Emi froze, not wanting to get accidentally cut. This was getting out of hand she thought as her breasts and ass reacted to the vigorous rubbing. She worried all the movement would get her cut, but Hannah’s firm hold was helping to reduce the motion. Emi tried not to move but felt she was losing her balance and would have fallen if Hannah didn’t have such a good grip around her thighs.
The door opened and Lucy stepped in carrying a stack of hand towels. She stopped suddenly, looking very surprised. “Sorry!” She said, turning her head away. She quickly tossed the stack of towels on the counter and left as fast as she could.
“No, wait…” Emi tried to quickly explain. But it was too late, she was already gone.
Becca and Hannah stood up, laughing but then bent over, breaking a gut. It was too funny! Liz was also laughing but she was still vigorously working on the final nine. She pressed harder on Emi’s ass causing Emi to step forward to keep her balance.
“Stay still,” Liz commanded, slapping Emi firmly on the ass with her bare hand.
Shocked, Emi backed away from the three girls, glaring at Liz.
Hannah and Becca also stepped back, giving Emi some room. “Oh, now you are in trouble!” Said Hannah, laughing.
Becca wasn’t laughing but she was nodding in agreement with Hannah. They both looked at Emi to see what she would do.
Liz looked sheepish. “Sorry Emi, I guess I got carried away.”
“Good luck with that,” Becca said to Liz as she and Hannah headed towards the exit.
Emi continued to glare at Liz until they were both alone in the room.
“Also, I’m sorry about the other day in the rickshaw,” she added, looking down.
Emi had enough of her. It was time to put her foot down.
“Look Liz…”
Liz kept looking down. “Ben’s outside and he has some important info about the guys. Apparently Sarah is up to something and he wanted to warn you,” she quickly blurted, obviously trying to change the subject.
Emi thought about that. Ben was outside? She looked at herself in the mirror briefly and winced. There she was, completely naked. In a moment, he was going to see her. The thought made her flush, but she had to find out what he knew. Ignoring Liz, she left the room. At least now she didn’t look like she just woke up plus the nines were gone.
Outside the washroom, Ben was sitting at a nearby desk, waiting. Becca and Hannah were gone. Lucy was sweeping way over on the other side of the room and had her back to Emi. Was she facing the other way on purpose? Her loincloth butt was cute. She would have to talk to her later and explain that she wasn’t doing anything in-appropriate before rumors spread.
“Hey Emi,” Ben said, sitting up. His voice sounded confident, for some reason.
Emi started walking over to him. As she approached his friendly eyes blinked a few times, taking in all of her body… making her feel warm.
“Liz said that you have some intel,” Emi said, trying to maintain her composure.
“Uhh… yeah, umm… I was talking with Travis and he said that Sarah had told him and the other guys that you were going to be mentoring them while naked.”
“Yeah, so?” That was to be expected.
“Well, he said that she is giving an extra week of vacation this year to the dev that manages to get you dressed again. I mean, at least while you are mentoring us. She said bonus points for creativity – whatever that means.”
Emi figured Sarah would try to pull some stunt in this regard; however, this seemed below even her. She shook her head in disgust. It was hard enough just facing them like this, now it was going to be impossible to keep them under control. Her fear was mounting. Sarah was practically bribing them to harass her.
Liz overhead that as she joined them. She put her arm on Emi’s shoulders. “Don’t worry Emi, I don’t think it will be too bad.”
Annoyed, Emi lifted Liz’s arm off and turned to face her.
“I’m serious, I got this,” Liz said, confidently.
Now it was Ben’s turn to look at Liz in disbelief. “What are you talking about Liz? Those guys don’t even give you the time of day.”
“Just trust me,” she said grinning mysteriously as she walked away.
Ben and Emi looked at each other. Emi looked away, her fear mounting.
“Look, I’m on your side, Emi. I will do what I can to help. I’m not swayed by bribes,” he said earnestly.
Emi felt she could believe him. But what could he do? Regardless, it felt comforting to hear those words.
“Thanks, Ben. I appreciate it. Let’s just get today over with,” she said, trying to sound confident. She turned and headed towards the area where she expected to meet the guys. They were probably going to start showing up soon. She took a deep breath and tried to get her fear under control.
Sorry for the short post. I’m in a rut these days, and I just need more time. This small post is just to show that I’m still around and the story is still being worked on.
Now that’s a nice cliffhanger…
Great you are back! But take your time, no need to rush things.
So how far did Liz get carried away? Did she trim Emi’s bush so far to just stubble?
will the Devs guys trying get Emi dressed finally make Emi confess that she is Court ordered naked.
Thank you Readerman. Happy to read a new chapter and don’t worry about it being “short”. 🙂
Hannah just likes to be helpful, doesn’t she? Just giving Emi a little trim to look her best. That’s what friends are for 😉 She did make Emi’s hair look better, after all. I’m sure she did the same for Emi down there.
So much going on for Emi, she has trouble keeping up. Especially with everything that’s on her mind this morning. And now hearing that Sarah is trying to sabotage her? Wow, that’s just terrible. Surely word will get out about this. After getting an earful from Ruth after the meeting, I guess Sarah was more than a little pissed about the whole Emi training her team in the nude.
I hope it’s not all going to be too much for Emi.
Excellent chapter!
Loving the story. I do wonder if her natural leadership skills ever end up surprising her as a little bit of domination she never knew had. ?.
I guess we did see it a little in the office building, but I was thinking along the line of toward the dev guys.
Thanks, everyone.
I’m not the greatest multitasker, so patience is appreciated.
Yes, it was Hannah that did a little trimming of her runway, not Liz, and it was just a few loose hairs. It was not a shave down to stubble, lol…
Yes, Sarah and her devs are definitely a problem and Emi does have a lot going on.
Thanks for reading. I feel lifted by these comments.
(I wonder how to leave bigger spaces, html tags? nbsp? yep)
ReaderMan, you are doing very well. A good chapter and a story in general. I like. Just try to write more often, probably at least a chapter in a week or two, not longer. Once you started it, you should finish it, despite any difficulties. It’s common for people not to finish, to throw halfway, and this is not good. Started – finished, started – finished. So a person feels better.
Perhaps there are 2 chapters or 42 chapters left until the end of the story. You will decide. This is your story, your world and you are main creator of it. It’s up to you to make the final decision what the story should be, not the readers. For example, we can advise that there should be a struggle, several parties, both for and against, that there should be impositions, blocking, condemnation, depreciation and humiliation, and possibly submission. So that there should is also an internal struggle as well: fears, experiences, anger and joy, pondering and inner feelings, emotions. Games and intrigues are also present. But I would like to see a happy ending to this story, where Emi could walk calmly, both in clothes and without.
You are doing well so far, speed up a little. But remember, the last word is yours. Good luck.
Thanks Pavel, I appreciate the prod forward. I will definitely finish the story… I mean, unless I die. I’ve just had some bad luck with writers block and then some colds and now some fatigue and dry cough… lol…
I’ve gotten over both the writers block and challenges with this next chapter, but I’m just simply unlucky these days with a string of colds and just trying to survive. This next chapter is tough and slow going for me as I flesh out new characters but after that the floodgates should open up again. Or not, we will see how it goes in the next few weeks.
“I will definitely finish the story… I mean, unless I die.”
Such an ominous statement, ReaderMan! Especially since you posted it (March 10) during a pandemic. I trust that you are fine and merely suffering from writer’s block, a serious ailment, to be sure. But, to my knowledge, it only kills fictional characters, never the flesh-and-blood authors that bring them to life.
I’m sure I speak for a lot of people when I say that we need more Emi! Now, more than ever. That goes for the other stories on The Storyboard for Naked Fiction as well. Keep those stories coming! What better way to enjoy quarantine than with a glass of a favorite beverage and a quality ENF tale!
But about Emi (Training Week, prelude) in specific: I love how helpful everyone (except Sam) is behaving. Becca with something to remove the last traces of her ‘nines.’ Hannah brushing her hair, snipping a little behind her ear. Liz pitching in on her ass.
“Relax, Nine, we are all girls here.” LOL! (Seemingly reminding Emi that shortly it won’t be only girls.)
And then Hannah snipping away . . . this time around her runway. What a great moment! (my favorite from this chapter) But then Lucy catching them all working Emi over. (another great moment)
But then we end with a cliffhanger, Sarah, scheming and bribing. But Liz claims, “I got this. Just trust me.” I imagine there is quite a bit of fun just ahead!
Here’s hoping that you and yours are healthy, ReaderMan. Take your time, but don’t keep us waiting toooooo much longer!
Your friend and colleague, Blair
Yeah, I’m fine… being careful with the pandemic as my immune system isn’t strong. I would probably be writing if I didn’t have this epic fight with a mild cold (or string of colds) that won’t go a way.
Don’t worry about Emi. The story hasn’t been abandoned, it’s just on a long pause.
Glad to hear it is just a cold, colds. I expect you are right about that. Don’t forget about Emi…none of the rest of us have.
Thanks Blair. I won’t forget. Emi will be back when the time is right.
My apologies to everyone for the delay.
No need to apologize, in my humble opinion.
I agree with Blair above, we haven’t forgotten about Emi. I hope you get better soon.
Thanks Cave,
I’m gradually feeling better. Hopefully I’ll be back in the writers saddle before we know it. These damn pandemics are turning out to be a lot more distracting than one would think, eh?
Trying to get back to normal is not easy.
I hope everyone is surviving and not affected too badly. And if any of you are affected, I hope that it’s short and temporary and that we can all put this well behind us.
Optimistically, I have a feeling… that after the pandemic, the world will be better than ever before. The energy in the world will be both appreciative and celebratory and very very hungry to go out and have good times. At least, for the most part… I hope that’s what happens.
Dear Readerman —
First, I apologize for being so late to read this chapter. It was very good and I have only a few small suggestions:
I didn’t notice whether anyone has already mentioned these small typos to you, but early on you say ““A nocking at her door,” and once you spell Lucy’s name as “Luzy.”
You spend quite a bit of time with the girls cleaning the 9s from Emi’s body and so you mention a bottle of something. While this was, of course, a fabulous idea (can’t imagine where you got it), it seems odd that you mention “the bottle” so many times without ever saying what it is. I assume it is mineral spirits, so why not just say so? Most people know what that is so it might as well be mentioned.
My main criticism is that although a woman might decide to go to work naked, she certainly would not do so without first taking a shower and brushing her teeth. Perhaps you intend for her to be “on her way” to doing those things in this chapter, but if so you should at least mention it. I’m surprised she leaves her room without at least checking herself out in the mirror and brushing her own hair.
Related to the above, a woman who is compelled to walk around naked would also be meticulous about shaving. If she has a landing strip, she would not have neglected it for so long that her stubble would be long enough to trim with scissors! Again, you may have intended that the only hair being trimmed was part of the landing strip itself, but as written it sounded otherwise. I definitely think you should keep this moment, but just make that point clear.
And speaking of pubic hair, since her friends are so very mischievous it would not surprise me if in some future chapter Emi is sleeping deeply enough that they shave that landing strip off altogether. (Alcohol might need to have been involved keep her asleep during this process). When she wakes and sees in horror what they’ve done, she would not be able to do anything about it in the short term and would have to go about her business that way. Further, she might even decide she has to keep it that way because the only way to grow it out again would be show stubble for a while.
Lastly, I realize you are setting up some conflict with Sarah’s offer to the guys to compel her to get dressed. However, if these are straight dudes I would assume they would be rather conflicted. They should WANT her to stay nude, shouldn’t they? Most of the males of my acquaintance would not trade such an opportunity away for a mere week of vacation.
No need to apologize. These are exceptional times.
Thanks. I fixed those typos just now and added your mineral spirits. Later, I’ll double check all the bottle mentions.
Emi’s not quite that worried about her looks, but yes… you have a point. This is a special case and so I’ll toss in a sentence or two in that regard.
Okay, I will clean-up Emi’s landing strip… section. Yeah, I agree. That needs more tending too.
People tend to want her to go clear-commando. Shameless. 🙂
Yeah, that makes sense. Don’t worry, it will all roll out in a way that feels realistic for you.
It’s good to see you back, Molly.
Readerman, perhaps when Emi does go clear commando it’s in such a way that it has a lasting effect. Like one of the girls uses a hair remover instead of shave cream and the effect is Emi is bare down there for weeks and after a time it’s expected that she keep it like that.
Tomorrow, I’m going to re-read my Emi notes and re-read the last couple chapters and try to gradually get my head back into this. It’s been a while and I’m starting to miss Emi as well.
Initially I thought, wow… a pandemic. Everyone is at home. Maybe the stories will come flying in and we will all have lots to enjoy. But nope, I guess we are all quite distracted with the world changing so much and so quickly. Such an event does draw ones attention. But maybe this is good for fiction in general. We have all watched these movies or read stories where society suddenly changes somehow. It was just never quite believable. But now that we have witnessed it, perhaps those types of alternate world fictions will become a little more popular or easier to suspend disbelief.
So Emi, time to get back to training-week. It’s a busy week and Emi needs to toughen up. How ever did she get into this situation?
I wonder if I should try an experimental first-person chapter next. Likely I’m not technically strong enough to pull it off very well, but I might try a few pages and see how it goes. When done right, first person can be powerful and immediate.
Hey Readerman, I love your story so far and love the latest chapter. I agree with the others that she should have her pubic hair removed without her permission, I feel like it would add to her humiliation (and I really hope she stays embarrassed/humiliated).
I hope you continue the story soon!
I second that! I love it when an embarrassed naked gets her pussy shaved and it’s not her idea but it happens anyway. Then she has a whole new sensation whenever the winds across her lips and she feels horny so much more than she did before.
Again sorry to everyone for unusual delays with Emi.
The last few months have been a perfect storm of distractions and problems. I’m still thinking of my story and I make notes and a little progress from time to time. I foresee more writing in my spare time in the coming weeks. Things should gradually start shifting back to normal. It could be another month before I post again, but things are moving in the right direction now. Thank you for your patience.
I see several authors picking up where they left off. Things must be getting back to normal. Perhaps it’s time to pick up your pen again, or at least talk about where the story is heading? Some feed back from the readers might stir something and cause some inspiration.
Really glad to hear you’re getting back to it ReaderMan. Isn’t it weird how we get all this time on lockdown and the creative projects don’t get the love and attention we want to give them? When it happens it happens and we will enjoy the results.
Race you to the end of a novel! 🙂
Thanks orflash64. I’m writing now when I can, which is a lot more than I was in the last few months. I’m not blazing trails but I am making efforts to speed things up a little both with productivity and also with Emi’s plot pace.
I appreciate that FortranWrench, thanks. Yes, that is weird. I totally expected stories to come flying in while we were all in lockdown. Racing? That sounds way too fast!
Update: My brief foray into first person has been reverted. Instead I watched a few Ellen Brock videos and she helped me realize what some of my writing issues were and how to start fixing them. She’s awesome!
Yep. I’m getting back into it. You can thank Blair and FortranWrench (and these comments) for inspiring me.
cheers
While you haven’t posted in awhile but starting to write, could you hint at the direction the story is going in? The long periods between postings is frustrating.
Sorry for the delay. I’m trying to make the direction ‘good’. At least better than before. Meaning interesting (and/or) dangerous conflictS with more meat on the bones. Better character interactions and more action. More specifically training week and then opening day for the resort. I can’t hint at more than that. I hope that you all like it. Could be a week or two more, not sure yet as I also want to do a better job with editing.
It’s been two weeks, anything?
It seems as if all my favorite authors are suffering writer’s block lately. It’s one thing to write a good story and be finished with it and not come up with a new one. But a great story that’s not finished and is just left hanging, should be used to interrogate prisoners.
I hope something new is coming. Starting to forget where you left off. Hoping Emi gets a pussy shaving that’s not her idea and has to deal with a whole new level of embarrassment.
I probably have enough pages now to post something soon. Mon or Tuesday most likely. Lots of editing to do.
The writer’s block is now behind me, I hope. I do feel some new momentum beginning to grow.
But yeah, I know how you feel. I’ve been waiting forever for Kinsey’s fresh new perspective on mailgirls. 😉
If you are looking for a new Mailgirls story, Liz Stanton just posted a prequel to Life of A Mailgirl, the beginning of Mailgirl 13’s start of her 3 month internship as a mailgirl that turns into a two full years contract arraigned by her college professor. On Literotica.
Good news to soon hear something new from Emi!
And I am also waiting for Kinsey’s new mailgirl story…
Oh, I’ll definitely read Liz Stanton’s new mailgirl story. Maybe in a hammock on the weekend. (I mean when I am taking a rest from writing!)
While we all wait for Kinsey’s story let’s try to support the writers around here who HAVE been producing. I’ve also been awol for a while and haven’t been reading much as of late. If you read something, make a comment.
Liz Stanton’s new mailgirl story is a rewrite of her original mailgirl 13 story. The first story was excellent, but this one goes deeper and is simply fantastic writing. She evolved her writing up a notch and I’m hoping that it turns into a two-part book. Also still waiting for Kinsey Bay’s story. 😉
As to my own story. Well, I’m so very close, but I couldn’t make the post today. Too tired after a long hard hike. I figure 1 more day of writing, 1 more day of editing. Then I will be ready. But when I have the proper time for those 2 days? Hopefully in under a week.
When you said you post by today, I was so excited. But like Congress promising a another stimulus, I was disappointed. I hope it comes together soon.
lol… OMG don’t compare me to Congress! What’s going on down south (from Canada) is very painful to see. We are all in this together. In a few months hopefully, a vaccine will start rolling out and things should start to calm down across many fronts. That said, we should all try to wisely prepare for a tough winter.
With Emi, I’ve been ‘trying’ to elevate my writing. First I thought to switch to first-person, but then I realized that I had a tendency to narrate (distantly) for many situations that should be up-close and personal. Ellen Brock helped me realize that with her online videos. Plus I have been looking at some of ‘our writers’ who are good at this (and a friend) and trying to learn or get technical inspiration from them.
For whatever reason, I had a lot of trouble with this current post I am working on. Partly because I knew it was important for future posts, and I needed to get it just right. I also tend to be stronger and quicker with plot-based posts rather than character intro posts. But things should be a lot smoother moving forward after this. The last thing I needed was a tough thing to write in the middle of a pandemic. lol…
Is it about narration style of the story? What part is tripping you up? Have you asked season writers how to do it?
No, it’s about ‘overusing’ a distant narration style when I should simply show Emi’s pov more. Yes, thanks – I’m getting some help with my narration overdosing problem. lol…
Some writers do two different points of view of the same chapter. You could do Emi’s pov and then do the broad view of the same incident, if you can’t decide which way to tell it.